A friend

A friend

A Poem by Black

I'm sorry friend
I can not be,
can not be the one you want me to be
Can't be the words you whispered in my ear

If i wanted to be your loved one,
you asked it so sincere,
many words just can't grasp
the emotions, the feelings, such a mess


Sorry friend,
I can't be,
I can't be your lover
I'm not the one you wanted to see.

I'm sorry friend
I give you hope,
that some day a sun will rise,
Just like our love.

I'm sorry friend
i mean it sincere,
Because I can't answer your love
and it's hurting you
you're no longer a friend of me

© 2011 Black


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I think you have a good poem-- in the making. I'd like to see some better vocabulary and cleverly put together phraseology. Not all poems call for it, but 99% do. This poem, unfortunately is not purposely simple, so it could be stronger with it's emotionally striking words. Also, if you enter a draft like this one, you should mention that it's only a draft. If it's not a draft, think about fixing some of the grammar issues so that we can all see you care enough about your poetry to type it correctly. I'm sorry about the harshness, I'm simply too sick of seeing all these little, easy-to-fix problems in poetry.
Other than the few issues, I hope you continue your journey as a poet and I wish you the best as you try to improve your work in this art.

Thank you for sharing,
Kiri

95/100

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This is so sad, So well written and expressed.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Awww... That is so sad... Are you trying to get a tear from me? :) Very well written as usual. A couple mistakes but nothing too major. Another wonderful poem! Good job and keep on writing!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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