Candles

Candles

Candles flicker in the soft wind
Room unlit, curtains closed
closed door,
no one can come in

the soft nuzzle on my cheek,
making my head feel warm and loved
The soft touches on my arm,
makes me phantom his huggling warmth

I can't sleep
I can't lay still
waiting...
then he says, ''''Goodnight teddybear'''

and I respond all the same
Goodnight daddy bear

Author's Note

thanks to the the reviews i could edit and improve myself

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

This writer has the tender touch.
Her writing exudes the little touches in life
that bring us close to tears.
This is apparently an ode to Father.
There are not enough words to explain
how nice this is.
Thank you ,
---- Eagle Cruagh

[Dove]

This is a heart warming poem and it put a smile on my face

[Linear]

Warm are the thoughts that drift slowly from your blankets, a loving touch, a word spoken gently, makes hearts soar.......quite wonderful :0)

[Jeremy Baker]

I like the fact that age and time haven't dimmed the memory of the love you and your parents obviously have for one another. Original and leaves the reader feeling good and warm. Well written.

[compositionc]

I love it. It's so cute and snuggly and wuggly and huggy and sweet. Made me feel all fuzzy wuzzy inside. :)
Some quick edits though,

/makes me phantom his huggling warmth/ I found this line kind of confusing.
/i can't lay still/ capitalize the 'I'
/waiting../ Three dots (...)
/and i response all the same/ capitalize the 'I' and it should be 'respond'

In all, it was a sweet, heartwarming little write. Nicely penned.

[Haifa]

It is sweet and cute poem... teddybear! ;)

[Thea]

Makes me remember of my teddy bear! Sweet poem, nicely written! :))))

[Tasha]

This was cute and heartwarming write. Great job.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[I Cast a Shadow]

I almost found this strange but I liked the premise.

[Rae]

Aww! It's sweet! Keep writing!!