Tickled Pink

Poetic Synergy

Her word of love felt soft as down;
each letter light ~ my darling noun.
The symbols joined on page of white;
together formed a jeweled crown
where once a frown ... now smiles bright.
Expressing care, she had to write.

I laughed when 'L' then touched my heart;
it found a spot where trust can start.
Then in an 'O' I read her plot,
to make my blues with haste depart.
Her plan was smart ... despair forgot
when 'V' n' 'E' her pen did jot.

So now the word is made complete;
she wrote with ink as red as heat.
It melts the page and makes me think
about how thoughts on paper meet ~
and blend so sweet ... I had to wink.
Thanks, from a friend who's tickled pink!

2023

Author's Note

This is a form of poetry Susan developed called 'Synergy'. Apparently rhyme swapping has become acceptable behavior in modern literature, not that they weren't doing it long ago. All's fair when writing love!

For more on the form please ask or check out Susan's profile.

Reviews

[Susan 🦋]

Hey Bill, I really enjoyed this poem! Certainly made me smile!! Thank you 😊 I’ve already read Richard’s review ( wonderfully stated) I see he has pointed out a few tricky spots in this form. Regardless, it is a witty and clever write! Thanks again! 💐

[William Michael Reeves]

Now I see what I missed Susan. The whole phrase swaps, not just the rhyme. I think all I saw were the A's and B's in the diagram of the form. That definitely adds a tricky element to the form. Back to the writing board ...

Thank you

[Susan 🦋]

😊 you got this!

[Neville]

made me smile and no kidding .. and I must confess a fascinating poetic form that until just now, knew nothing of .. well done the pair of ya (I mean you & Susan .. I assure you, I wasn't alluding to your multiple personalities :)

[William Michael Reeves]

I just discovered it reading both Susan and Richard. Turns out I may not have understood some of the requirements so I'm going to study it some more and try another one. Glad to have written a smile for you. Thanks Neville

The three of me aren't really split. We work in tandem quite well actually. Willy the front man, Billy the think tank who handles the free verse and feeds the beast who lives on rhyme ... billigami. We three thank thee for keeping us in your memory!

[Richard🖌]

Good afternoon, William ☀️

It's great knowing you're still working on expanding and improving your poetic skills, by venturing forth into new forms and styles. I wish more poetesses and poets would become more adventurous in broadening their poetic horizons and experience … it's a shame for one to let the depths of their latent talents go unrealized; but, "C'est la vie!"
Cute title you've pinned onto this one, with a playful feel that fits so well. I can just see the joyful smile on Susan's face that someone (besides me) is giving her beautiful and challenging form a go. To select love and poetry writing as your theme is quite fulsome and inventive, too … your potential virtually dances upon the page!
Basically, Dear Poet, your effort is a fine one, with spot-on rhymes, pretty darned good punctuation and grammar, vivid imagery, strong metaphor, all wrapped in a nice syntactic flow and poetic-voice, with a number of "easy fix" issues you might wish to note for future composing of the Synergy, perhaps, even to correct this original version.
1) V1L5 is out of beat and a syllable short. Easy fix suggestion:
where once a frown ... now smiles bright.
where once a frown … now, smiling bright.
2) V2L6 the correct elision/contraction for "and" is 'n.
3) One of the requirements for this form have not been met: "Lines 2 and 5 break at the forth syllable, swap, and repeat with each other, creating the rhyme scheme as follows: a,B-A,b,a,A-B,b." Which V1L2 and L5 would read:
each letter light ~ my darling noun
my darling noun - each letter light
V2L2 and L5:
it found a spot where trust can start.
where trust can start, I found a spot.
V3L2 and L5:
she wrote with ink as red as heat.
as red as heat, she wrote with ink.
Although, what you've presented, William, is certainly wonderfully, poetically rendered, to say the least.

Here's trusting my review has served you well, William, and conveyed how very much I enjoyed reading your first excellent effort at composing the Synergy. I plan to write another in the near future, hopefully, on a more uplifting note than my "How Parting Feels" Synergy. Don't you think it's amazing how there's a uniquely, yet, different poetic form that best fits each individual possibility.

Well, I did not intend to expend so much time today on one review, but it was well worth the price of ink.
I loved your Synergy, William, and with a tiny bit of effort, it can easily be mastered.
Thank you most sincerely for sharing! ⁓ Richard 🤜✫🤛

For anyone who might wish to give this amazing original form of Susan's a go, here are the details:

SYNERGY
An original form created by Susan A. Capozzi
April 2020
Two verse minimum, 6 lines per verse, in iambic tetrameter (8 iambic syllables).
Lines 2 and 5 break at the fourth syllable, swap, and repeat with each other,
creating the following rhyme scheme:
xxxxxxxa
xxxBxxxA
xxxxxxxb
xxxxxxxa
xxxAxxxB
xxxxxxxb

[William Michael Reeves]

Your review does me great service Richard. Both to understand the requirements of this form, as well as make my day! Thank you. I must have had a bit of poetic dyslexia here and there in this. And I appreciate the correction on proper placement of the apostrophe in a contraction. I've always been a little confused on that one. Details, details ... but they are important to me. I care, as do you, 'n I appreciate that. The adventure new forms present is irresistible. I like to think of original forms as snowflakes. Unique poetic structures. I agree, it is amazing how our minds connect with our hearts then meet in the ink of our pens. (I noticed you lost your pen. Sorry to see it go. I thought it was a nice way to distinguish you from the other poets) Susan was tickled when I shared this with her and I'm glad you enjoyed it too. Thank you!!

[William Michael Reeves]

Happy to tickle your funny bone Coyote. Thanks

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved the complete poem William. The ending was so good. Nice to be tickled pink on occasion. Thank you my friend for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[William Michael Reeves]

Happy to tickle your funny bone Coyote. Thanks

[Coyote Poetry]

You did and you are welcome William.

[Betty Hermelee]

I really like the way to play with letters, as such it spells love and one can feel it in you words... it's sensual and soft and very clever.
Best, B

[William Michael Reeves]

Where would a word be if not for letters? I'm glad you felt the texture of this poem. Tickles just a little, but not so much to hurt. Thanks B

[Betty Hermelee]

you're very welcome W.
Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

rhyme swapping, kiss swapping...
poems touching each other.
sensual.

[William Michael Reeves]

I keep wanting to write a poem about words and letters copulating to conceive a poem. My capital I wants to get with a little o. Workin' on it. Thanks j.

[Alla Antsis]

Playful, lite and sweet... LOVE has many faces! Awesome work!

[William Michael Reeves]

Thanks Alla. Many faces in few letters that tickle heart.

[willweb]

That was unique and creative. I have read many of Susan's poem but I guess I just didn't notice the form or haven't crossed paths with it yet. Pretty cool my friend

[William Michael Reeves]

Hers is 'In Seasons Trust'. She has a detailed description of it in her notes. You are good with the rhyme and should give it a little time. I bet you'll come up with something sublime!