Poetic Reviews 3

Third installment. Three from me for thee

For Carlos Lorenzo Estrada's poem 'A Simple Poem (about love).

On a note of love fell hope from above;
danced on desperate opaque wind
like leaves from heaven, cast as sinned.

The song once sublime ... silence now fills time.
No steps echo down halls of hearts;
through doors left open, trust departs.

Lonely melody drifts near shame's entry ~
held open lust's mauve intention;
magnetic red attracts tension ...

suspends the right song with dark deeds done wrong.
Caught infidelity implied,
the hope for new commitment cried.

For, springs eternal man's desire carnal;
knows instincts cloud his better sense,
yet, seeds a storm to feel intense.

And though our loins pined, passion intertwined
to save brittle leaves from falling.
Listen! You'll hear true love calling.

2022

A conversation with lightsong after reviewing her poem 'Unearthly'.

Thank you for the beautiful sunrise
it fills my heart with sincere warmth
expressed from a beautiful night here,
you make me feel so blessed.

You're welcome,
for my sun which is now yours.
I am happy to be circling it with you
across oceans, to your shores.

Now, my moon is your moon.

Our moon
circles us as we pass below it.
It's light pulls the blanket of darkness
out of our sight ~
center's our orbit,
in natural order held tight
to circadian rhythms, where dreams take flight.
(I hope you have a good night)

Good morning, till goodnight.
My sun kisses the moon
goodbye.
And in today's goodbye,
may your dreams sleep bright.

I'll sip on my dreams
while you enjoy your morning brew
free of expectations,
thick as primal stew.
And if you dilute it with tears from flowers
it will surely taste genuine and true.

Thank you for the sun!
She says to you please,
sleep well ...

may our hearts be at ease.

2023

For Lisaview's poem 'Push'.

Write your joy today
don't wait another day
lift your now in the heat and share
inundating
living words that melt strife
flying in our mind's sky
to land where our words stand.
Stamped love preps
thoughts penned by poets with ideas deft
all who read the meaning are clear
completed rhymes shine in time
with patience we read them together,
and learn.
At the end of the day we write
pushing life into words, celebrating their light!

2022

Author's Note

Please find these poems and then mine will make some sense.

In Carlos' poem he wrote, write me a poem. I can't resist that! This is what he got about what I got from his.

It's been fun to have a friend on the other side of the planet. As my sun sets hers rises. Toward the end of our conversation lightsong said we seem to have a little co-write going. Pretty bold of us to think we can possess the orbs that rule our lives.

I love a good poem about writing poems. I matched Lisaview's lines with rhymes.

I really appreciate all the inspiration I've found here in writerscafe. Most of you have gotten one of these at some point. If not, you just might because I love to write! And read you. Life eclipsed my time for poetry for quite awhile now. I'm back! I have a pile of poetry to purge. I look forward to reading, and writing, to you. Thank you!

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

So many times I become inspired by reading in this forum I haven't a clue how long I have been here but of all the sites I have been in and on this one always has a special place for me! The amount you can learn in here is tremendous and the people that dwell here are some of the most helpful you will find in any forum.

[William Michael Reeves]

I have been helped and inspired as well. Thanks Robert. Nice hat! Did you get cut by the site? Or intentionally peeking over the edge of reality to see what's going on in here?

[Robert Trakofler]

I have been attempting to publish on the printed page so I have cut a lot of my old poems off of all of the sites I use but this one is the oldest not sure when I started here!

[Cherrie Palmer]

Here stands a poets poet I enjoy when you do one of these.

[William Michael Reeves]

No way! Someone reviewed my reviews. Thanks Cherrie. I'm reading you. You never know when the inspiration will strike ...