Liquid Seasons

With Karen and Kathy Sue Sills. Ni Somanka

Humid sun shining
the Eastern sky blazing
rain refuses to fall
on the dead sweltering Earth
Summer's steamy months are here

June sweats on July
evaporating the sky
dying, August calls
a declined sun that gave birth
liquidating all our fear

Seasons shimmering
until Winter frightening
liquid denial
dealing life despite death's mirth
raining Spring as dead skies clear

On desert parched dry
pleading rain starts to cry
hyper Summer stalls
hot disturbia unearthed
Western winds caught in a tear

2022

Author's Note

Ni is the Japanese word for two. A Somanka is a collaboration where one poet writes a Tanka and the other answers. Felt like that needs more poetic meat so Kathy Sue wrote the first, I answered then rewrote the two and they finished with the last. And for you Japanese purists out there, please forgive the rhymes.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved the complete poem. You allowed the reader to fall into thoughts and into places.
"Seasons shimmering
until Winter frightening
liquid denial
dealing life despite death's mirth
raining Spring as dead skies clear"
The above lines were my favorite. The bled the truth. Thank you, Williams, for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[lightsong]

You already know many forms and seem to write them effortlessly. another very well written piece of collaboration, when the reader reads it as one poet, it means all poets did great work, like here. well done all of You.

[William Michael Reeves]

Thanks. You put that well. It did help that they sent all 4 at once and my challenge was to do just that, tie 'em together. As for effortless. Well, that would be a long conversation about my brain function. But when the effort pays off with that warm fuzzy of completion....I think you know the feeling. Thanks.

[William Michael Reeves]

Oops! Thought we were on the Renga. Attach this comment to that review.

[lightsong]

😂😆 You are really funny! I will attached it don't worry.

[William Michael Reeves]

Hi. Glad I make you laugh. On my Bard Card i want it to say morale officer too. Hope your poem is writing well.

[lightsong]

Ok Mr. morale officer! now I MUST leave your a review to your Renga since I already had a comment to my invisible review 😂 oh my! hhhahaahha! how's my poem going? oh well NOT SATISFIED YET!

[William Michael Reeves]

How does the old song go? Anticipation..is making me wait!

[lightsong]

wait... wait wait!