This was really fun to read.... and what is better in life than living, loving and laughing....the essence of us all...I love the first line of each stanza and I get how you create it.. then use it in scenes of a movie, a show ,etc. well done.
Best, B.
Posted 2 Years Ago
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2 Years Ago
I wrote that first word and first line changed everything. I was going to do dying and something the.. read moreI wrote that first word and first line changed everything. I was going to do dying and something then the whole movie thing pushed me in a whole new direction. Try one! It's fun!
I tried writing a few of these years back but they didn't have the fluidity to them I wanted. You did a great job with this. Nothing here sounds forced or contrived.
An enjoyable read with a splash of wisdom.
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2 Years Ago
Thanks. I think sticking to 4 syllables helped with that flow. Harder to write but less complicated .. read moreThanks. I think sticking to 4 syllables helped with that flow. Harder to write but less complicated to read and creates that easy rhythm. I'll dig and see if I can find yours if posted. I've meant to read you but as the circle grows harder to make it around. Thanks
Bill
2 Years Ago
Those poems were deleted many years ago, Bill. haha
Read on your own timeline. I've had hundr.. read moreThose poems were deleted many years ago, Bill. haha
Read on your own timeline. I've had hundreds of reviews over the years. I'm in no rush. :)
I agree William. We must do one thing we love. Everyday. A hopeful and positive poem. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote
Posted 2 Years Ago
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2 Years Ago
I guess that's why so many of us seem to write so often. It's what we need to do. Trying all the dif.. read moreI guess that's why so many of us seem to write so often. It's what we need to do. Trying all the different forms of poetry has been keeping me busy. Glad you like this.
2 Years Ago
I did like this one Bill. I like the poetry that teaches us. We ain't done yet.
This was really fun to read.... and what is better in life than living, loving and laughing....the essence of us all...I love the first line of each stanza and I get how you create it.. then use it in scenes of a movie, a show ,etc. well done.
Best, B.
Posted 2 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Years Ago
I wrote that first word and first line changed everything. I was going to do dying and something the.. read moreI wrote that first word and first line changed everything. I was going to do dying and something then the whole movie thing pushed me in a whole new direction. Try one! It's fun!
Thanks. It was fun. Write a word then talk to it while it talks to me. Billigami wants to do superca.. read moreThanks. It was fun. Write a word then talk to it while it talks to me. Billigami wants to do supercalifragilistic....HELP!!
2 Years Ago
Happy hunting and sharpen your pencil for that one
Another brilliant creativeness from You. the only actor, star and the in charge of my stage (my life) is ME! woooho! that's what I see here.
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2 Years Ago
I became the self absorbed actor who manages to find love and have a laugh at himself. High praise f.. read moreI became the self absorbed actor who manages to find love and have a laugh at himself. High praise from you! Brilliant feels so good to hear knowing you recognize the hidden revealed meanings and structures. Thank you Gounwah!!
Clever piece....I have written several of these and they are fun.
There was a time several years ago when a couple people started writing them and then they really caught on...
besides Haiku and Senryu...about the only form I tinkered with...but I started finding them too forced.
I don't feel this one is...it sneaks up on us and I really like that.
j.
Posted 2 Years Ago
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2 Years Ago
Thanks Jacob. I think it helps to try to write them as a single sentence. I just went with 4 syllabl.. read moreThanks Jacob. I think it helps to try to write them as a single sentence. I just went with 4 syllables and that seemed to work but no rules that I know of. I felt the forced thing you were talking about in the first one but felt they smoothed out as I went. Since you have more poems posted than brain cells in my head could you direct me to some of yours?
I live in Seattle. I have been a nurses aide most of my life and my experiences as a caregiver for people with disabilities has inspired much of my poetry. I love the puzzle of poetry. Expression with.. more..