Old Shirt

I'M TIMELESS
LIKE THE SHIRTS
HIPPIES USE TO WEAR

FILLING THE ROOM
AS SOON AS I WALK
IN

MY SPIRITUAL
COLOR OF MY ORA
IS TIE DYE

I'VE ALWAYS BEEN THIS WAY
COVERING MY SKIN
STAYING HIDDEN FROM
THE WORLD HIDING
BEHIND MY OLD SHIRT

OVERTIME THIS SHIRT I WORE
BECAME OLD AND WORN
TO THE POINT IT WAS TORN

MESMERIZING THOSE WHO
PEAKED IN BETWEEN THE HOLES

REVEALING THE ESSENCE I
HIDE FOR SO LONG
FAREWELL OLD SHIRT
I DON'T NEED YOU ANYMORE

Reviews

[Lucien Maier]

Great word play really well done!

[Dreamer]

i like the idea behind this. "...colour of my ora is tie dye" I like this the most because this short phrase lets you know alot abt the persona- Dimensional right? good job

[Captain]

I think this is a very strong piece and I like the symolism you used.
Simple but bold, making it easily relatable from a positive and personal stance.
'Captain

[biggerthenu]

Thanks for the kind word Ms.c but sorry u wasn't the peeker lol.

[biggerthenu]

Thanks for the kind word Ms.c but sorry u wasn't the peeker lol.

[Christina May Shanaberg]

I read it last night and felt my hand upon yours! You're poem is a winner, for sure.

I see you very clearly and understand your wonderful words. You have a wonderful writing style, with much research.

I love the ending where the old shirt is cast away, because you don't need to hide behind it anymore. I, also, love that someone peeked between the holes; maybe, that describes our relationship. I have seen greatness in your mind, from the beginning.

Again, I am in awe!!

I will send edit notes, later; I am just enjoying this write so much as it is. It should be published. It's beautiful, simply beautiful; imagine, me at a loss for words.

[TheArtOfInsanity]

I have to say, you really are one of my favorite authors on this website, you know how to use metaphors and similes to grab the readers attention, and after that hook at the beginning, it just doesn't let up, it's intense in a really soothing way, if that makes any sense.

[Vertigoingnowhere]

this is awesome i love this! good job! mind checking out some of my work? thanks :)

[Art Freeman]

i like the ideas behind this poem...the shirt as a metaphor for the persona we were to survive in the world...until one day...we feel safe enough to wake naked!!!...
good write...

[Rene Velez]

An artist coming out of his shell, I like this one a lot bigger...it has a nice flow..