Old Shirt

Old Shirt

A Poem by biggerthenu

I'M TIMELESS
LIKE THE SHIRTS
HIPPIES USE TO WEAR

FILLING THE ROOM
AS SOON AS I WALK
IN

MY SPIRITUAL
COLOR OF MY ORA
IS TIE DYE

I'VE ALWAYS BEEN THIS WAY
COVERING MY SKIN
STAYING HIDDEN FROM
THE WORLD HIDING
BEHIND MY OLD SHIRT

OVERTIME THIS SHIRT I WORE
BECAME OLD AND WORN
TO THE POINT IT WAS TORN

MESMERIZING THOSE WHO
PEAKED IN BETWEEN THE HOLES

REVEALING THE ESSENCE I
HIDE FOR SO LONG
FAREWELL OLD SHIRT
I DON'T NEED YOU ANYMORE

© 2013 biggerthenu


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Great word play really well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago


i like the idea behind this. "...colour of my ora is tie dye" I like this the most because this short phrase lets you know alot abt the persona- Dimensional right? good job

Posted 12 Years Ago


I think this is a very strong piece and I like the symolism you used.
Simple but bold, making it easily relatable from a positive and personal stance.
'Captain

Posted 12 Years Ago


Thanks for the kind word Ms.c but sorry u wasn't the peeker lol.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Thanks for the kind word Ms.c but sorry u wasn't the peeker lol.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I read it last night and felt my hand upon yours! You're poem is a winner, for sure.

I see you very clearly and understand your wonderful words. You have a wonderful writing style, with much research.

I love the ending where the old shirt is cast away, because you don't need to hide behind it anymore. I, also, love that someone peeked between the holes; maybe, that describes our relationship. I have seen greatness in your mind, from the beginning.

Again, I am in awe!!

I will send edit notes, later; I am just enjoying this write so much as it is. It should be published. It's beautiful, simply beautiful; imagine, me at a loss for words.



Posted 12 Years Ago


I have to say, you really are one of my favorite authors on this website, you know how to use metaphors and similes to grab the readers attention, and after that hook at the beginning, it just doesn't let up, it's intense in a really soothing way, if that makes any sense.

Posted 12 Years Ago


this is awesome i love this! good job! mind checking out some of my work? thanks :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


i like the ideas behind this poem...the shirt as a metaphor for the persona we were to survive in the world...until one day...we feel safe enough to wake naked!!!...
good write...

Posted 13 Years Ago


An artist coming out of his shell, I like this one a lot bigger...it has a nice flow..

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on November 17, 2011
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HELLO I'M ONLY HERE BECAUSE I EXIST AND POETRY HELPS ME ANALYZE EVERYTHING AROUND ME ITS MY THERAPY AND I'M HAPPY TO HAVE BEEN INVITED TO WC I'M NOT BIG ON GRAMMAR BUT I ENJOY WRITING IF THAT MAKES AN.. more..

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