WAIST DEEP IN SIN

         waist deep in sin

          how did I get in    

loving the warm you put off

so I pull you near

so good cavemen would have

struck you with a club over the head

then pull you

by your hair to their lair

                 crazy men and women stealing whats

    not even theirs

                                      just for a taste of

Your perfect gift

youngsters shouldn't  but they should be reading this

            most abuse it

      beat it up for a NIGHT

              and never STAND in it again

its call making love

when i get in

guaranteed to leave it pleasured

throbbing yearning more of this

good love

I share because

of love

this is exclusively for you and me

but not

how it was lined up to be

knowing I don't wanna give

you a ring

dirty devilish me

this is the secret i keep

waist deep in sin

how do I live in

this affair

stealing God"s

gift to a matrimonial Godly affair

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Surely love is an emotionally deeper than deep perception .. what is making love isn't necessarily feeling love. Your words, your format are very intriguing, make sense, illuminate your spirit. Thank you very much for sharing.

[TheArtOfInsanity]

Hmm I can honestly say I like this, the way you set up each stanza was powerful and creative:

"youngsters shouldn't but they should be reading this
most abuse it
beat it up for a NIGHT
and never STAND in it again
its call making love
when i get in
guaranteed to leave it pleasured
throbbing yearning more of this
good love
I share because
of love "

That is deffinately my favfavorite part of this poem.

[Christina May Shanaberg]

I haven't seen you here, lately, but hope that you will be back. You have a very wise and talented mind. Yes, I have been waist deep in sacred waters, too. Loved your poem! Even, the picture that you chose spoke volumes!!

[Groovy]

interesting write

[Marie Harrison]

Nice! I love the slight amendment of this poem. It's a wonderful poem.

[Marie Harrison]

Ha! I love the cartoon at the end. Classic.
The message in your poem was beautiful.
I think both parties rob themselves in
the end. Better to commit to one another.

[biggerthenu]

thank you all for sharing your feelings on my piece it means alot more then u know thanks for taking time out

[Ladie NiQue]

Beautifully written! I read it twice!! Thanks for sharing. : )

[Dreamer]

i like this picture, things arent always what they seem. The poem was well written because i guess u used the surprise factor. I thought tht this was a wife but then i realize at the end she isnt. Put the ring on her finger if u love her...if u dont then be fair an set her free. You deserve someone to love u and 4 u to love in return and so does she. (jus a little friendly advice...if this is even a true story.lol) Good write:)

[November Gold]

Kudos on the message conveyed here! It seems sometimes like "making Love' is such a thing of the past, people are more about quick and easy these days, without having to work at anything. Great write!