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JUST MY LUCK HERE WE GO AGAIN
TIME AND TIME AGAIN IT HAPPENS
FALLING, TUMBLING
LIKE IN THE EYES OF A DOCTOR HE DOESN'T SEE BAD OR GOOD
ONLY HEALTHY OR SICK
THIS IS A PERFECT REFLECTION OF ME
CONSTANTLY FINDING DAMAGED GOODS
THERE'S NOTHING MORE I CAN DO YOU'VE BEEN DEAD FOR YEARS
BUT YOU COME ASKING TO BE REVIVED
I'M NOT GOD
BUT STILL I TRY
SEEING PAST YOUR SCARS
HAND ME THE DEFIBRILLATOR
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MESMERIZED ON HOW DEEP YOUR LOVE REALLY GOES 
NEVER DID I KNOW IT WAS GOING TO BE A WORM HOLE
NOW I'M IN LOVE WITH YOU
WHAT CAN ONE DO WHEN SOMEONE CONTINUES TO MAKE BAD DECISIONS
AND MY HEART IS HOOKED TO YOUR WORLD BEING DRAGGED ALONG
GIVING YOU SOUND WISDOM & ADVISE BUT NEITHER IS TAKEN
YOU'RE TOO DEAD TO BE HELPED I NEED TO LET GO AND REVIVE MYSELF
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Reviews

[Tasha]

Ha you're welcome

[biggerthenu]

THANKS AGENT I'M TRYING TO KEEP UP WITH YOU CAUSE YOU BE WRITING LIKE A RACE HORSE LOL

[biggerthenu]

YES YES YES THANKS INYRDREAMS

[biggerthenu]

MZ CHRIS YOU A MESS YOU KEEP ON PRESS ME FOR A STORY I JUST DONT KNOW BUT THIS WAS SOME WHAT OF A STORY FORCES IN A POEM LOL ALL I CAN SAY IS PRAY FOR ME WHO KNOWS AND IT LOOKS LIKE I HAVE A TON OF CORRECTS THANKS IM HAPPY U LOVED IT THANKS FOR POINTING SOME STUFF OUT I WAS UPSET WHEN I WROTE THIS SO I WAS JUST TYPING

[biggerthenu]

NO LIE I WROTE THIS IN THE MATTER OF MINUTES. RIGHT AFTER TAKING TO A FRIEND OF MINE. I WAS SO MAD, BUT THAT'S HOW IT CAME OUT SO IT WAS ALL ABOUT ME TRULY. YOU NAILED IT RIGHT ON THE HEAD. WOW YOU PEELED ME AND MY POEMLIKE A BANANA THANKS A TON YOUR REAL THANKS LONDON

[Tasha]

Great job. It was so powerful.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Becky C Strukamp]

Great picture to go with this poem. Powerful yes, sad yes, true sometimes, yes. Nice job.

[Christina May Shanaberg]

This is a powerful poem or should I say story! I hope there is an up and coming short story that is going to pop out of you.

Edit notes:

Line 7-Constantly finding "damaged" goods
Line 12-Seeing "past" your scars
Line 18-What can one do when someone continues to make bad "decisions"
Line 21-"You're" to ded to be helped I need to let go and revive myself

You have wonderful visions of "real life." I love it!!

[Nansi London]

Here's my thoughts. The message its self is a frantic, almost chaotic flow that sets perfectly for the state of mind of the narrator. It fits even down to the structure of the poem and though it may confuse one by the sporadic flow, its the flow its self that conveys the turmoil, the struggle, the feeling of being hopelessly trapped. There in lies the irony of it because through the chaos is clarity of the writers internal conflict. So I like it and love the idea of it. A wonderful piece of poetry; unique in its own way.
London

[biggerthenu]

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