CLEAR

JUST MY LUCK HERE WE GO AGAIN
TIME AND TIME AGAIN IT HAPPENS
FALLING, TUMBLING
LIKE IN THE EYES OF A DOCTOR HE DOESN'T SEE BAD OR GOOD
ONLY HEALTHY OR SICK
THIS IS A PERFECT REFLECTION OF ME
CONSTANTLY FINDING DAMAGED GOODS
THERE'S NOTHING MORE I CAN DO YOU'VE BEEN DEAD FOR YEARS
BUT YOU COME ASKING TO BE REVIVED
I'M NOT GOD
BUT STILL I TRY
SEEING PAST YOUR SCARS
HAND ME THE DEFIBRILLATOR
CLEAR
MESMERIZED ON HOW DEEP YOUR LOVE REALLY GOES 
NEVER DID I KNOW IT WAS GOING TO BE A WORM HOLE
NOW I'M IN LOVE WITH YOU
WHAT CAN ONE DO WHEN SOMEONE CONTINUES TO MAKE BAD DECISIONS
AND MY HEART IS HOOKED TO YOUR WORLD BEING DRAGGED ALONG
GIVING YOU SOUND WISDOM & ADVISE BUT NEITHER IS TAKEN
YOU'RE TOO DEAD TO BE HELPED I NEED TO LET GO AND REVIVE MYSELF
CLEAR

Reviews

[Dez H.]

Nice s**t dog. your poems are the truth pimpin. Keep that s**t up.
007.

[.]

original concept..I like that you give clear (pardon the pun) visuals which give definition to the piece along with the brilliant metaphor of a love killing you...you are dropping some neat ideas here..

[temoralez]

Thoughts:
I like this piece. I also like how you present "CLEAR" for two different people to revive: someone you know (I'm assuming it's a person) and yourself. Damaged goods? I get the impression that these are people you've met, but could it also mean something else? I'm curious.

Constructive Criticism:
Hmmm...I didn't see a lot of things that could use work on, but I would recommend using some periods so the reader can know where a sentence or idea ends.

[MS. BABy]

this was an interesing write for you but it was done very well

[Mark]

Dude, look inwards, not outwards for the meaning. Good write.

[Ruth]

Oh sweety...this is so saddening...wrenches my heart...to be there for others can be as heart breaking as anything! This is beautifully told! xx

[Fy Cecilia]

Wow! That was DEEP!
Consequences of love: TRYING TO SEE PAST YOUR SCARS. It's funny how love makes you dig for something to hold on to, that little thing that can be so small but appear real BIG.
I'm not mean, but let them FLAT-LINE. It's YOU or THEM!

[Coyote Poetry]

Photos allowed the words to come alive. I like the many strong statements. Doctors can assist in the treatment of medical care. But in the care of the mind is the choice of the person. I watched my father. Waited three days for me to come to him in Virginia to tell me he was sorry for being a bad father. I told him. He never had anything to forgive. I like the set-up and the questions raised by this excellent poem.
"THERE'S NOTHING MORE I CAN DO YOU'VE BEEN DEAD FOR YEARS
BUT YOU COME ASKING TO BE REVIVED
I'M NOT GOD
BUT STILL I TRY
SEEING PAST YOUR SCARS
HAND ME THE DEFIBRILLATOR"
Thank you for your powerful words.
Coyote

[biggerthenu]

Thanks velvet I'm haappy it cAME WELL BUT TO BE A TRUE FRIEND IS HARD WORK
BUT U ONLY GET A FEW IN LIFE

[VelvetRosetta]

Oh yes to love and be sucked in by there negativity, drains one of life, and it sure can be a pattern in life...Have been there myself, I have to be honest I have played both ends of this poem!
I like the way you set this up. It turned out well.