I wont push

                                              I WON'T PUSH




                        Patients and Love is what holds me steady

standing in the dark waiting

far from being lost

 i just don't want to move til the Sun comes up

the warmth you put off it truly a rush
 
I've been seeking refuge for a long time now

 its been years in this Wilderness 

now yearning for your land flowing with Milk & Honey

but it way to dark and I cant see anything

there's no way  you can rush the sun to come up 

as i wait the the cold air beats me up

hitting me from every Direction

so now I'm shivering in the dark 

with only hours til your near

but yet you hide cause I'm standing here or 

is it that i took to long

could it be that the darkness has changed my form

only time can tell

still awaiting dawn

only one thing I'm sure about 

I WON'T PUSH

Reviews

[Susie Q]

This is an awesome poem. Touches the heart. Patience and love is all we could hope for in life. I like the line , "only time can tell" since one of my own favorite sayings is, time will tell. Keep writing!

[Rene Velez]

cool scribe my brother, power and love...

[Christina May Shanaberg]

Edit Notes:

Line 1-"Patience" and Love is what holds me steady
Line 4-I just don't want to move "'til" the Sun comes up
Line 5-The warmth you put off "it's" truly a rush
Line 7-"It's" been years in this Wilderness
Line 9-but "it's" way "too" dark and I can't see anything
Line 14-with only hours "'til" "you're" near
Line 15-but you hide "'cause" I'm standing here or

This poem speaks of a great patience that any relationship needs. Good things come to those whom wait (patiently!) I feel that you have spoken true words of wisdom here. I won't push; something that I am only understanding, at this point of my life. As always your insight speaks volumes!!

[biggerthenu]

wow the famous Tate Morgan left a review im shocked u found the time thanks alot

[Tate Morgan]

I see this as a coming to grips with oneself and the person you became.It seems a coming home piece as well .

[biggerthenu]

thanks so much Ta'Shandra that was a confidence build I'lL keep pushing my pen.

[Tasha]

I liked this a lot, you are amazing!
♥ Ta'Shandra

[biggerthenu]

i see what your talking about but i like a clean look of things a natural flow im not all that good with grammar so that"s y i lack periods and commas and question marks i try to space it as u should read it i was hoping that would help from the lack of grammar and when i wrote this tons of emotions ran thru my head but thats poetry it brings different emotions to the surface but you cant push love period!! let me know what u get thanks for the review temoralez

[temoralez]

Thoughts:
It's good. I like how you ended it with "I won't push." I also like the phrase "I WON'T PUSH" as the title. I am curious. Does it mean something specifically? Or is it for the reader's interpretation? I take it as "I won't push" to mean I won't push you away from me.

Constructive Criticism:
In lines 16 & 17, I believe you were asking questions. If so, try adding question marks to clarify it for the reader.

[biggerthenu]

Thanks so much for reviewing it and sharing y0ur thoughts