Mute.

Haven't been posting in some time now. Making a lot of personal changes, all for the better :D. Started a new job, the best I've had to date, and soon will own my own home. So these are my thoughts...

For all the ones I wont remember.

For all the things I can't undo.

For all the times that have gone past.

All these things lead me to you.

I may have sold my soul to the devil.

I may have listened to the snake.

I may have played around with fire.

Always for a purpose and never for the sake...

Of it.

But I am imperfect.

I am tool.

I am an a*****e.

who acted so cruel.

And if I could go back again.

And re-do all the wrongs.

I woulden't cause I coulden't.

for all of that is gone.

and in the past.

I am who I am today because of the fact.

That I am imperfect.

I am a tool.

I am an a*****e.

Who acted so cruel.

And if I went to heaven.

It was only out of luck.

Maybe god could find some solice.

That this keeps me up at night.

And maybe he'll be happy.

That I know what's wrong from right.

And he'd know I only did it.

By the forcing of my hand.

And He'd understand the causes.

That make me seem like I've gone mad.

He'd know that when I get along.

I'll share my lot of wealth.

But for now.

Guess what...

I'm still imperfect.

I'm still a tool.

I'm still an a*****e.

Who's still being cruel.

And if I goto hell.

I'll be met with flower and cheers.

For in order to keep thriving.

I must be god's fears.

Reviews

[Jackie]

Wow what a interesting read. For me it sounds like it could be a song. The

"I am imperfect
I am a tool
I am an a*****e
Who acted cruel"

Part could be a chorus. And feel like it would be a great song... Keep striving buddy. Your doing very well.:)

[P.J. Amey]

That's awesome! Thanks for the reinforcement on that, I was going for a more lyrical approach with this.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

loved the last verse
very cool poem love it
thanks for entry into my comp

[George Coombs]

An interesting and engaging read PJ and may I say that I agree with Jackie that this piece could well be a song

[Voice]

"Always for a purpose and never for ye sake...of it." Awesome. The whole poem is so relatable. Well done! :)

[Voice]

The* sake....of it.

Typo. My bad

[Karen Redburn]

A very lyric poem with a ton of weighty words and thoughts. The twist at the end grabbed me. Excellent job, cheers!

[Cassidy14]

Very good here. Well-written. My critique is less rhyming, but be free to rhyme all you want! Great job here!

[Isabella Disney]

Loved it.

Even though my 'belief' is more like the Jedi, this is such a powerful line:
"I must be gods fears"

[Diane]

An awesome and interesting style you have here.

[KCthelastboyscout]

If you don't learn from the past you're doomed to repeat it.of course you heard that before.i also enjoy the fact that even though youre learning from mistakes you still might f**k up.but full steam ahead!!

[DevenGrant]

I can relate to this more than I'd like to admit.

[J.Arthur.B]

I would invite you to try different forms, poetry is free. not been obligated to rhyme or to maintain the form your text might go beyond. I would like to see your thoughts untied that's all.
hope you'll take it as a constructive review

regards