Complete Bliss!

Make what you want to out of it. It has a special meaning to me.

 

 

 

 My stomach gets weak days in advance

just thinking of what is to come

The day arrives and I am nevious as ever

for a piece of heaven is in my hand

the fear I once had is no more

tis the reason it is so easy

 as heaven drifts from hand to heart

 the whole world seems to make since

the rush of sound and light

as I get the blurred vision I have come to love

a nonstop motion for a forth a day

 secretes are revieled friends are made

the touch of skin the touch of hair

nothing beats the feeling of when you are there

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Kris Tate]

Nice description and i remember that feeling well, I have to say you did a good job of putting the feeling and emotion in the piece to carry it off

[Travis Lawrence]

Ecstacy? Let me know if I'm correct. Based on what I've experienced, that is what I would guess this poem is about. If so, I'd say it's a nice description of what it was like, though I only tried it the one time.

[Star-Runner]

I really liked this one well written..Kim

[Lara]

I totally understand.

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

I like the poem but there are a few corrections that you may want to make.

Here is what I noticed:
"the whole world seems to make since"
you need to spell this particular word 'sense'.


" secretes are revieled friends are made"
Secrets needs to be spelled without the third 'e''
Revealed is spelled with an 'ea'
Plus, I think that line should be seperated into 2 sentences
'Secrets are revealed. Friends are made.'


"the touch of skin the touch of hair
nothing beats the feeling of when you are there"
I think that there should be a comma to seperate some of this.
'The touch of skin, the touch of hair,
nothing beats the feeling of when you are there.'
The punctuation could use some revision unless it is your style not to use it.

Thank you so much for sharing. I hope that you didn't mind me pointing those things out.
Love All, Mejasha

[K]

I like the sentiments you expressed in this poem, and they're very relatable, maybe not to everyone but I found them so. My favourite line was, ' as heaven drifts from hand to heart'. It's beautiful. My only suggestion would be to tidy up the spelling a bit. Other than that, it was a very enjoyable, good piece.

[Riley]

This is awesome. One of my favorite writings of yours. It really shows the feeling your going though when your about to see that special someone. Awesome job!

[Gary Alexander Azerier]

HI,
I think you ought to edit this and adjust the space between your title and the piece. If I didn't scroll down I never would have seen it. (Just get rid of all that empty space.
I'll return. Also go over the poem. Try not to repeat words (like "as") (3 times in the second two lines!)
Good luck.
GA