Mine

Your eyes of an intense brown 

Pierce my gaze so quickly

That I feel every secret of mine

Can be read by the twinkle you told me about.

I want to discover your mysteries,

To feel your body next to mine,

Your warmth surrounds me at every turn.

The trace of your lips remains mine,

And a sweet taste is imbued in my body

After you lean over to me and kiss me 

Until you feel like I can't breathe anymore.

You made my body catch fire,

And the blazing sparks you give me

By your presence you make me shudder

When I hear your name, 

When I feel you around me.

I don't want to spend seconds without thinking about you,

I don't want you to disappear from my life.

Reviews

[Chris]

Revisited... good thoughts on intense emotions.

[Chris]

I toast "Missing Friends" once a year... Each year there ARE fewer and fewer that will miss me.

[Tina]

Wow ..I remember feeling that way about some one once.. being In love is a wonderful feeling can be dangerous to . Very good poem.

[keith]

i am floored by the intense beauty this poem of passionate want and need
no other words would do justice
and yes i did learn a new word today ... imbued

now for the critique ... what is there to say except thank you

[Chris Shaw]

Yes Claire, your title tells the reader something and I counted the word mine in your main text three times. Your reader is left in no doubt that you want this relationship to flourish. I feel love here and that is grand.

Chris

[bianca]

Love is such a strong feeling and sometimes it can overwhelm us and that's not always good for our soul. We need to judge with our minds too, and I learned this after I broke up with my bf.

[Chris Shaw]

Difficult to rein love in once you have boarded that train. Keep it on track and don't let it fall off the rails :)

[bianca]

That's what I will do. Thank u for ur advice and it was a pleasure to talk with you again!

[Chris Shaw]

Good to talk to you too. You take care now and be happy :)