Vibe of Sorrow

Thin veil of moody clouds

like my aged skin

I watch outside the window

a vibe of sorrow

over the mountaintops

shrouds my spirit

on these days

doziness overwhelms me

 

I dream of a day

with swollen white clouds

who ramble by

observe their passage

sometimes rapid

other times leisurely

 

I fancy the sun

once it pries bloated clouds aside

and forms shadows in my house

warms me to a buoyant mood

Author's Note

Prompt: Emma's Group

Reviews

[Lorry]

I like that "vibe of sorrow" phrase. I love looking at the hills and wonder if the cloud is just lost or wants a bit of quiet time to theirself.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Lorry for a fine review!🌷🌷🌷Warmly, B

[W. Barrett Munn]

Hi, Betty,

I think prompt poems are difficult to write and I salute you.
When I’m writing, I like to think of adjectives as salt; be careful as too much can spoil the dish.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your fine review; I like prompts, it gives me an inspiration when I have writer’s block!!
Warmly
B🌷🌷🌷

[Amy R]

Even though it has a melancholic tone to it, I enjoyed this little poem,
written so nicely, imagery and everything so fitting...

The juxtaposition between the dreariness of the current state ("vibe of sorrow") and the hope for a brighter day ("the sun... warms me to a buoyant mood").

No storm lasts forever but sometimes to much of it saddens us, just like memories. There should be many sunny Spring days ahead for you..
-Amy

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Needs some cheering up I'd say; some sunshine and blue skies. But storms never last. A sad read but gentle and kind.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for a cheerful review😊Warmly
B

[Michael Sun Bear]

Such a sad poem Betty. I have read it through 3 or 4 times. I am thinking about your first two lines, the veil like your aged skin. I have grown old, yet in many ways my heart feels young, and I often feel my outer appearance veils my true self. To me you seem to be saying nature is a mirror for your inner self, the clouded mountains holding sorrow (what sorrows within?). I love the imagery of shadows in your house and your spirit lifting.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Michael fora very fine review!🌷🌷
Warmly, B

[Robert Trakofler]

I am so jealous I can never do prompts my brain freezes the moment someone gives me a prompt sometimes i even start to get sweat beads on my brow its some kind of a weird response I get:/ I like your prompt response though it has very nice imagery to it!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Robert for a lovey review! i happen to love prompts …they inspire me🌷🌷🌷
Warmly, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I love the idea of wanting shadows in the house...not to hide in but has messengers that a cloud in life has lifted and we can rejoice about that.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Dear J
thank you for your lovely review🌷🌷🌷
Warmly, B🌷🌷

[Gee]

Cloudy, grey days should only be welcomed when our lives are blighted by loss and grief(well I think so) Sadly as we age these grey, sorrowful days become a regular visitor.
Hope you are keeping well Betty
Just for the record I agree with EmmaJ, your are probably the nicest, kindest poet in the cafe:))

[Betty Hermelee]

Dear Gee
what a lovely comment about me! ( I’m blushing)
thank you for a fine review, hope you are well😊
Warmly
B🌷

[Arundass TP]

My life is sacked by grief, sorrow and unlucky experiences. Now I think they all are mirages. Now I feel calm and quiet like still water in my old age.good poem

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you TP for a lovely review🌷🌷🌷Warmly
B

[Arundass TP]

Welcome friend

[Cherrie]

Sorrows veil is always weighted. Clinging to all it sees. Your melancholy poem is rich with emotion and visual depth.

[Betty Hermelee]

thank you Cherrie, much appreciated🌷🌷🌷
Warmly
B