WIND'S PASSION

changes in wind and love

A substantial wind lifts the sails to perfect stance

meantime the two hold the tiller

hair flapping straight back

glancing at each other off and on

smiles on their windblown faces

clouds drifting by at speed

just enough gale to arouse the sea into white caps

sails swing in staccato rhythm

 

Glances emerge as a kiss now and then

smiles convert to laughs

pink tongues feel passion grow

soon the wind diminishes to a sunset breeze

sails slap back and forth in no hurry

thereafter quiet imposes itself

the great sea releases white caps who listen

to the windless moments

time to sanction their lust

as they retreat below deck

and accept the moon’s tides

to carry them where they will

 

Author's Note

RAVIN INK Prompt

Reviews

[A.H.]

this poem reads like a romantic getaway. you describe the scene with artful words and lines, it sort of is painting a picture before us telling a sweet little story of a couple out on sea, with the wind and sails. the imagery and the chemistry is quite vivid and brings about the joyous moments in a relationship. Thanks for writing and sharing this, Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much, that is quite a lovely review!🌷
Warmly, B🌷

[Ken e Bujold]

in every poem I read, I always seek and hope to find one magical line that transports the senses to faraway thoughts ...

"the great sea releases white caps who listen ..." is just such a a line.

Thanks for sharing Betty

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Ken, glad you found that line!
Warmly, B

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful story in the poetry dear Betty, I do life is like nature. We can flow to the right places. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry. I did enjoy.
Coyote

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear John, always love your comments!
Warmly, B

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Betty.

[MCS]

The ebb and flow of your words paints a lovely visual, thank you. Enjoyed :)

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your kind review, much appreciated!
Warmly, B

[Thomas W Case]

Beautiful work, Betty. You make this come to life.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Thomas, much appreciated!🌷🌷
Warmly, B

[Vol]

Betty!
A poet friend once asked me why I thought all great poetry has sex at its core. As though there might anything more important. I spend a lot of time thinking about the war between reason and emotion and how we are made of both like "right brain" and "left brain." Life can be harsh, even cruel, so given leisure, I know where I want it to lead me and it is always more fun than when confronted with reality. The smooth inside of a thigh, is always better than being shot in some big city drive-by...
Vol

[Betty Hermelee]

I' right with you Vol!
Always a pleasure!
Warmly, B

[LisaCarol]

Betty - I’ve lived in a land locked state all my life with no experience in any type of sailing. This poem provided a description of the passion and love for sailing, and love for another. I really enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing your writing.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Lisa for visiting and writing such a positive review, much appreciated!🌷🌷🌷
Warmly
B.

[carl]

very nice piece of work - got the wind nicely tucked away in time for play - well done -carl

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Carl, very much appreciated!
Warmly, B

[Amy R]

Wow magnificent words, even though short, quite meaningful, which I love..
In your poem it shows clearly that the wind serves as a metaphor for the forces that propel both the sailboat and the couple's relationship, while the sea reflects the ebb and flow of their emotions.

Imagery on point, loved tha playfulness of the couple.. "Glances emerge as a kiss now and then /smiles convert to laughs /pink tongues feel passion grow"

Very true words, cute couple, thank you for sharing.
-Amy

[Betty Hermelee]

Dear Amy
WOW, what a wonderful, spot on review!!!
Thank you immensely
Warmly, B

[Amy R]

You're very welcome Betty 🤍

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Betty... now I understand the Passion for Sailing and becoming intoxicated with feeling the roar of thunder below. softly, Pat

[Betty Hermelee]

Indeed Pat, this is important...passion always wins in the end!
Warmly, B