A POOL OF ROCKS

Life can be short

My darling

the day you slipped off that jagged cliff

and tumbled into a pool of rocks

I knew then you vanished forever

still, I cannot give credence to it

my mind and soul fail to accept

were you so laden with burdens

that life was no longer bearable?

 

I believe that are souls still exist as one

holding on tight to our many secrets

still, I fancy that our bond is unbreakable

perhaps your enigmas are hidden

deep inside the breath of your fractured spirit

not disclosed to me

 

I shall mourn you each  day

confused, yet compliant

and strive to embrace

you were my entire universe

shall I place a memorial to you, my love

on this very spot?

oh, it pains me to conceive of this catastrophe

 

I must behold you in my dreams

imagine our life as it could have been

I, the only one who knows the pointed cliff

and that, my darling, shall be

our last impenetrable secret

 

 

Author's Note

photo fineartamerica.com
THIS IS 100% FICTION

Reviews

[Pete]

tragic and touching to say the least. sadly telling - this is why we need to be kind to each other as we don't know what burdens each of us is carrying. well told.

[Betty Hermelee]

thank you for a fine review!
Warmly B Happy New Year!🌷

[emmajoygreen]

Wishing you peace and joy for 12/13/2024 - will message later .. .. :) (will delete this then!)

[Betty Hermelee]

ditto to you Em… thanks for reading!
later,
Warmly, B🎄🎄🎄🎄🎄

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! I thought you were describing me. Just kidding.
Catastrophic in nature, loving in essence, empathetic in tendency.
You are good at scenes and portraying ideas.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much Sami, I really appreciate you!
Warmly, B

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure.

[Amy R]

Wow, this poem had me from the start, all those emotions hanging there.,
For a moment I thought it was real like personal, but luckily I got to the author's note.
Rich imagery and it flows really well. Thanks for sharing..
-Amy

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for a wonderful review! Glad you really liked it…
Warmly
B🌷🌷🌷🌷

[Amy R]

You're welcome B.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thank you for sharing this. it was absolutely tragic but your elegy was beautiful, perhaps a testament to the joy you felt with this person. mental illness runs in my circles and ive lost a couple people. beng a 'suicide survivor' (someone who lost a loved one to suicid) is a kind of grief distinct from others. there's a book written about it No Time to Say Goodbye, which helped me. for my part, i believe that people who end their lives do so in a moment of confusion. he loved you. he just wasnt thinking clearly at the time.
please take time to process everything. and if ever you write a poem, know that i will be there to read it and support you.

Ern.

[Betty Hermelee]

thank you for your compassionate review!
warmly, B🌷

[Dara]

Oh my! This is very deep and the emotion is palpable. Well done. You had me going until I read the Author’s Note. Whew!

[Betty Hermelee]

thank you Dara, glad you read my note!🌷
warmly, B

[Soren]

The loss of someone dear by suicide is a painful experience and one that haunts one for a lifetime. In this well written poem in letter style one can hear the pain and sorrow that goes with missing someone from this. Very nicely worded Betty

[Betty Hermelee]

thank you for a very astute review, loved it!
warmly
B🌷🌷

[emmajoygreen]

Forgive the blasphemy, Betty, but thank the Lord. Your words were so near a truth that.. have had to find breath, dear you. Your imagination and gentle heart knows how to.. express pain in such a way that time can near stop. Your fiction is another's reality. What an incredible writer and human being you are.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much EM, but that's way too much praise! you are so dear...and a great friend!
Hugs, B xoxo

[Lorry]

My first thought was that I had read this before, but then I realised I was thinking of a news story where a tourist was doing yoga on rocks in Thailand during a storm got swept out to sea, leaving only her yoga mat behind.
Even in fiction we can mourn something or someone lost, which is far easier than the non fiction versions that invade our lives without warning.
Nicely penned Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

I'm glad you liked it! I like to write in the first person, so So I must distinguish between fiction and reality....thank you for your lovely comments
Warmly, B

[Betty Hermelee]

I think what you read might have come from "AT BRIDGE'S END" , the book I wrote in this language style...would love if you would buy on Amazon and review it
Warmly, B!