A Fish Without the Sea

A Fish Without the Sea

A Poem by Betty Hermelee
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I am lost without you, a deep void 

I miss your touch

your sea green eyes

pungent perfume that I can only whiff

I am a fish without the sea

a bird without a nest

a flower without a bloom

 

I yearn for you

the silkiness of your black hair

your laugh, your cry

a sting within my soul

I thirst to retain you by my side

 

I am lost without you

nightmares linger over me

pondering where you are

perhaps in places of dark and danger

a fear that all I possess is your face

in my mind’s eye

 

Yet I trust I can find you

somewhere where the moon lights my path

the sun enlightens my heart

do not desert me

for I am torn without you

broken


© 2024 Betty Hermelee


Author's Note

Betty Hermelee
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The loss of someone you love is like being a fish out of water. The constant ache and feeling of not being whole is heartbreaking

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you PB for a lovely review!
Warmly, B
I know this feeling all too well.
You have captured the emotion beautifully!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Weeks Ago

you have plenty of talent are you are a good writer!
Warmly, B🌷
FlaLover

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you!! Your compliment means a lot to me!! I never thought I was good enough to even be noticed.. read more
Betty Hermelee

2 Weeks Ago

of course you are noticed…. keep writing …your work is very good and i will keep reviewing! 🌷.. read more
Such beautiful poetry dear Betty. A sense of intense yearning. The posted image tells a story. The final three lines are heart breaking. Wonderfully penned 🌹

Posted 2 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Months Ago

thank you dear Chris, a lovely review and a hug across the sea🌷
Warmly, B
Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

Reciprocated Betty ((. ))
The pain is palpable. Good work, Betty.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Months Ago

Thank you Thomas, my friend
Warmly, B
intensely vivid imagery describing that feeling of suffocating when that someone is not there. this is an amazing open love letter, written with the care and sincerity that love letters deserve. every line speaks on many volumes, every stanza tugs at my heart. through these words i can really feel what you're feeling; and i can tell you, i am not a romantic at all.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Months Ago

Thank you EM for you understanding and sensitive review🌷Warmly, B
An unused bench is the perfect pic for this one Betty. It feels too stark for one person to fill and always lends itself to the thought of a couple coming along and being put off using it by the solo person, so ends up never fulfilling it's purpose and giving people that bit of respite to take a load off and ponder all that needs pondered.
Maybe next time you pass you will stop and take a seat, giving that bench it's only purpose in life and yourself a reprieve from the thoughts consuming every waking moment.
Very nicely written.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Months Ago

Thank you my dear friend, always appreciate your reviews





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I will not rate till i would know your views

I am lost without you
nightmares linger over me
pondering where you are

What is the meaning of this? I think it was not that clear
I know it was you pondering but it also looks as if the nightmares pondering too

Which is quite "funny"
a fear that all I possess is your face
in my mind’s eye

The structure was quite weird

Nice poetry though
WIll you accept 84 I can debate. Before i rate. Thanks.

Posted 2 Months Ago


0 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Snow_

2 Months Ago

Why did you delete mine? I just told you why i thought it was contructive...My viewpoint
Betty Hermelee

2 Months Ago

okay great!
Snow_

2 Months Ago

sure you are welcome
Wow Betty that's love such a simple write yet the words grab to read on and let us forget the flow its the imagery that makes one feel the emotion but the ending is great an ever ending battle we have within.
Thank you for sharing, Excellent write.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Months Ago

thank you dear M for understanding review, much appreciated!🌷
warmly, B
Nicely penned A void lost appearing the theme in all the stanzas as if echoing how deep the void was. Touched my heart.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Months Ago

Yes, it was a deep void in his soul; think you for you lovely review
Warmly, B🌷
Snow_

2 Months Ago

You are welcome
I see the loneliness and how depth it's through this poem good work

Posted 2 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Months Ago

Thank you TP for a lovely review.....
Warmly, B

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Betty Hermelee

Black Mountain, NC



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My love of poetry results from my love of art. As a painter I am able to express myself on a canvas. As a poet my words come from my heart, my moods, sometimes sad, mostly upbeat. I like to use vivid .. more..

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