A Fish Without the Sea

I am lost without you, a deep void 

I miss your touch

your sea green eyes

pungent perfume that I can only whiff

I am a fish without the sea

a bird without a nest

a flower without a bloom

 

I yearn for you

the silkiness of your black hair

your laugh, your cry

a sting within my soul

I thirst to retain you by my side

 

I am lost without you

nightmares linger over me

pondering where you are

perhaps in places of dark and danger

a fear that all I possess is your face

in my mind’s eye

 

Yet I trust I can find you

somewhere where the moon lights my path

the sun enlightens my heart

do not desert me

for I am torn without you

broken

Author's Note

Thank you for reading!

Reviews

[Snow_]

I will not rate till i would know your views

I am lost without you
nightmares linger over me
pondering where you are

What is the meaning of this? I think it was not that clear
I know it was you pondering but it also looks as if the nightmares pondering too

Which is quite "funny"
a fear that all I possess is your face
in my mind’s eye

The structure was quite weird

Nice poetry though
WIll you accept 84 I can debate. Before i rate. Thanks.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow Betty that's love such a simple write yet the words grab to read on and let us forget the flow its the imagery that makes one feel the emotion but the ending is great an ever ending battle we have within.
Thank you for sharing, Excellent write.

[Betty Hermelee]

thank you dear M for understanding review, much appreciated!🌷
warmly, B

[Snow_]

Nicely penned A void lost appearing the theme in all the stanzas as if echoing how deep the void was. Touched my heart.

[Betty Hermelee]

Yes, it was a deep void in his soul; think you for you lovely review
Warmly, B🌷

[Snow_]

You are welcome

[Arundass TP]

I see the loneliness and how depth it's through this poem good work

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you TP for a lovely review.....
Warmly, B

[Pete]

ouch. well that certainly is a problem - not a good place to be. disturbing feelings expressed herein. that sure is some fish out of water, gasping for what it needs and longs for. title's metaphor and accompanying pic speak volumes too.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Pete for your interpretation, much appreciated...
Warmly, B

[jessyyjacob]

Hi betty

Children are raised.
What we can say when tgey rule their own by grabbing other life.
They said they are not raised they born so.

[Betty Hermelee]

thank you!

[Antifranticbabydoll]

I can feel this on a deep level, this is how I feel without my partner. When I was without them.
It's like reading my souls testimony, from another's perspective. Thank you for writing this

[Betty Hermelee]

you’re very welcome
warmly
B🌷