STRAWBERRY JELLO

STRAWBERRY JELLO

A Poem by Betty Hermelee
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What comes before!

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I float in strawberry Jello

my arms and legs push and pull

like a frog gliding in a shallow stream

though I am human

I have not stumbled upon the universe

it seems like forever

drifting in a pool of warmth

all curled up in an orb

 

It is quite black in here

perhaps it is due to my eyes that want to open

yet they are not ripe

I can sense my limbs

however slippery they are

 

A rope is attached to me

thus, I do not get bemused

in this syrupy abyss

as I tend to sleep often

it also nourishes me

 

 

Serenity envelops me

I hear my tiny heart flutter rapidly

like a little drum

gentle melodies far away

beyond my sweet gooey world

perhaps it is the universe summoning me

it is time!

© 2024 Betty Hermelee


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Betty Hermelee
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Beautiful poem, capturing the very essence of life.

Posted 4 Days Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Days Ago

Thank you Mr Black, for visiting and reviewing my poem, much appreciated!
Warmly, B
You, madam have seen heaven. Ahh strawberry jello my fav

Posted 1 Week Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Days Ago

Thank you for visiting and reviewing my poem
Warmly, B
This poem is a tender and imaginative portrayal of life before birth, capturing a unique perspective with vivid, sensory detail. The image of *“floating in strawberry Jello”* creates a sense of warmth, sweetness, and softness, conjuring an almost dreamlike, womb-like world. Lines like *“I can sense my limbs / however slippery they are”* and *“a rope is attached to me…in this syrupy abyss”* suggest both the fragility and security of the speaker’s state, evoking a gentle sense of curiosity and calm.

The whimsical language and sensory focus bring to mind the work of poets like Sharon Olds and Mary Oliver, who often explore life’s intimate moments with deep attention to bodily and emotional experience. The final lines, *“gentle melodies far away / beyond my sweet gooey world,”* suggest the call of something greater beyond this safe, enclosed world, introducing a subtle anticipation of birth and discovery. Overall, this is a beautifully crafted, whimsical piece that transforms a universal experience into a sweet, original vision.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Weeks Ago

Wow! This is such an intuitive review; understanding every word I wrote, and putting it all together.. read more
Yana Larson

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you very much ❤️. Good luck with your artworks🤗
Betty Hermelee

1 Week Ago

Thank you Yana for your creative reviews!!!
Warmly, B
cool title. great description of another world inside the womb. quite creative and nicely articulated. as jim morrison sang with the doors, "Into this house we're born, into this world we're thrown."

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Weeks Ago

thanks Pete, always a creative review, much appreciated
warmly, B
Interesting lines penned. I feel it is a deep emotional work, maybe penning the feelings of depression or maybe a hard recovery from a physical illness. Anyway I hope you are feeling much better after letting it all out on paper. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Sara

Posted 1 Month Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Month Ago

Thank you Sara for visiting and a lovely review
Warmly, B
A great poem about birth, or before birth...
Strawberry jello... Yummy. 😃
I enjoyed reading this one very much.
Well done Betty. Good story, very imaginative.
Bright blessings.


Posted 1 Month Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Month Ago

Thank you friend for a very bright review, Much appreciated🌷
Warmly, B
The_Ancient_Rock

1 Month Ago

You are most welcome friend. 🌹
Ah, to be swimming in jello again, without all the hassle and grief that being a real proper growed up person brings, like bills, taxes, stress and thirty minute lunch breaks to name but a few of too many.
The only downside I can detect would be the horror of being picked up by the spoon then hearing a slurp!
But I'd rather be there any day than in traffic, so bring it on, says I!
Not long back to reviewing Betty and lots to catch up on. Stay tuned! 😃

Posted 1 Month Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Month Ago

a great reviiew Lorrry and many thanks
much appreciated!
warmly B
dear Betty.. I have a 💜 Heart Murmur.. it seems to guide me in Streams of perpetual melodies by Mozart — and Thus I am Born Again and renewed as Holidays unfold… and Once Again the Light from Heavens Hemisphere shows me the Path where Lions and Sheep will Guide the Weak and Faint of ♥️ Heart. Be Brave and Weather the Storm where Warm thoughts Dance and Celebrate a Time of Acceptance. Softly, Pat

Posted 2 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Months Ago

Dearest Pat
thank you for an enlightening review, peace be with you🌷
warmly, B⭐�.. read more
Oh wow, this is something that made me feel like I was in another dimension and not planet earth, what must it feel like being anything else than a human...
Beautiful language and imagery seen, I enjoyed reading.
Thank u for sharing
-Amy

Posted 2 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Months Ago

Thank you Amy for a lovely review and feeling like you were on another planet!
Sometimes tha.. read more
Amy R

2 Months Ago

I agree, most times it feels so comforting to be away even if its a few minutes. 🌸🤗🤗You're .. read more
nice piece of work - carries a meaningful image of the conscientiousness of a child in the womb, lovely wording of wonder, expectation, and comfort. Well done, dear poet. -carl

Posted 2 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Days Ago

So sorry for the late response, but thank you friend for a lovely review!
Warmly, B

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Added on September 17, 2024
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Betty Hermelee
Betty Hermelee

Black Mountain, NC



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My love of poetry results from my love of art. As a painter I am able to express myself on a canvas. As a poet my words come from my heart, my moods, sometimes sad, mostly upbeat. I like to use vivid .. more..

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