IN SPITE OF THE SUN

do not judge!

We search once more

through thickets of branches

viewing waltzing clouds

which shroud the sun

time to breathe in scents of fresh grass

on the meadow green

teeming with clumps of clover

rather than the airless forest

where ferns and laurels seize the air

to leave us sticky with sweat dripping

its way to our limbs

 

We sprint with our belongings

stumbling over tree stumps, small rocks, and puddles

to the open space of the meadow

where the sun can no  longer judge our intimacy

 

Clouds reassure us to re-new our covert romance

although they whisper about the risk that our picnic

may soon turn to mud

we fear, but nonetheless savor what remains of our food

 

We have an urge to caress on soft earth

on a hillside beneath a willow tree

though the clouds grow into large billows of fluffy gray

we delay, in suspect that our passion

may be put on hold

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading!

Reviews

[Arundass TP]

Beautiful poem. You have a great talent in observing nature. Excellent work

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks T.P., appreciate it
Warmly, B

[Marie]

How sad that the weather ruined both a beautiful picnic and some afternoon delight also, but there is a sense of acceptance of what is, rather than a frustration for what is not. Finely penned, with a lovely visual connection between the couple and Mother Nature. Excellent use of imagery and word choice. A very charming write! Thank you for sharing, Betty...

[Betty Hermelee]

An excellent review, very thoughtful; thank you so much🌷
Warmly, B

[Marie]

Most welcome always, Betty...

[Stella Armour]

finding the perfect place in the perfect moment only to have clouds come and dampen the ardour, very frustrating but naked in the rain sounds very appealing also :))

[Betty Hermelee]

Yes it does Stella; thank you for a thoughtful review
🌷
Warmly, B

[Amy R]

The poem captures the tension and passion of a clandestine romance, highlighting the risks and rewards of forbidden love.

The use of personification, as seen in "Clouds reassure us" and "time to breathe in scents," adds a sense of intimacy and connection between the characters and their environment.

Really enjoyed this poem.
-Amy

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear Amy, so glad you enjoyed it
A fine review!🌷
Warmly, B.

[Amy R]

You're very welcome hon,
have a nice Sunday.

[Betty Hermelee]

You as well🌷🌷

[andrew mitchell]

Love the title Betty. Nice imagery. Yes in spite of the sun it’s business as usual, the show must go on, be it romance in this case. And when it’s outside romance the sun is just a backdrop.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Andrew for a fine Review🌷
Warmly, B

[Tom]

it is indeed a fine metaphor in visual imagery the sun encouraging young love juxtaposed to the bleak forrest with its thicket branches so difficult to overcome in order to get to open pasture, yep, let not those who seek dipserion from their throned of judgement thwart happiness through blossoming love...

[Betty Hermelee]

A fine review Tom, and many thanks!!
Warmly, B

[Soren]

There lingers here a fear of interruption and the inability to complete fulfillment. Beautiful imagery lines this poem. Very nicely done Betty. Love the description of nature and its beauty.

[Betty Hermelee]

A very well written review Soren; you really feel the emotions🌷
Warmly, B

[Pete]

you enjoy leaving the reader in suspense. "judge not lest ye be judged." enjoyed the nature references. a bit risky and risque. someone said that the hills have eyes. great title and writing. well told.

[Betty Hermelee]

Very thoughtful review Pete, always love all your nuances🌷warmly, B