HIDEOUT

fearing the cosmos, intimacy

HIDEOUT

 

Skin to skin

fever to fever

they lay upon an open meadow

eyelashes near a touch

whispers, giggles, and frolics

 

Corner of a lens

they catch the moon with a smirk

stars with a wink

bashful, they collect their belongings

and race toward the forest

where they hide in their intimacy

 

Alone, breathless from run

they flop and slump on leafy earth

into each other’s arms

albeit clumsily, yet sure to accomplish their intentions

 

At dawn they awaken in warm caress

from their dozy eyes they view a clementine sky

with hues of plum seep through the branches

like a rumba dance

they linger in the thick

in fear of the sun’s discontent

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

Lovers finding a hidden place to enjoy the embrace of each others touch and nearness. So many wonderful lines in this piece and I enjoyed the descriptions of the sunrise. Beautiful

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much PB, appreciated!
Warmly, B🌷

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome. Those secret stolen moments can last a lifetime in our memories

[Betty Hermelee]

Very true!
Warmly, B

[Soren]

This write is rich with images so rich that should not be read by any on a diet. I love the way that you have not given names to the characters but leave them anonymous. A very nice write of seduction and romance.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Soren, a great review!
Warmly, B🌷

[Poetic_Vixen]

That is one heartwarming romantic imagery, the details of the scene are so nascent and fragrant, reflecting beautifully on them the two lovers materialise even more magically like a fairytale, so many colours I witness in your poems, forest greens, Clementine sky, reddish plums lush green under silver moon's glow, everything comes together like a dream in this poem and it makes it undeniable sweet. Really loved reading this poem from you my friend! Wishing you warmest of my love ❤️

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear friend….a beautiful romantic review
Warmly, B🌷

[Marie]

Wow! What a beautifully crafted poem in this delightful write filled with passion, sensuality and the most phenomenal depiction. As I read the first verse Adam and Eve came into my mind, though I have no idea why, Betty.
"they view a clementine sky
with hues of plum seep through the branches
like a rumba dance
they linger in the thick
in fear of the sun’s discontent"
What a picture you fleck for your reader in the stunning visual detail of these lines! Love the various figures of speech also and how you use them through excellent word choice. A classic write, dear Betty. Thank you so very much for sharing. I really love this poem...

[Betty Hermelee]

Marie, you're too kind!!! thank you for a stunning review
Warmly, B

[Marie]

Most welcome always, Betty...