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A Poem by Betty Hermelee
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fearing the cosmos, intimacy

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Skin to skin

fever to fever

they lay upon an open meadow

eyelashes near a touch

whispers, giggles, and frolics

 

Corner of a lens

they catch the moon with a smirk

stars with a wink

bashful, they collect their belongings

and race toward the forest

where they hide in their intimacy

 

Alone, breathless from run

they flop and slump on leafy earth

into each other’s arms

albeit clumsily, yet sure to accomplish their intentions

 

At dawn they awaken in warm caress

from their dozy eyes they view a clementine sky

with hues of plum seep through the branches

like a rumba dance

they linger in the thick

in fear of the sun’s discontent

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2024 Betty Hermelee


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Betty Hermelee
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Wonderful imagery used in the poem, your poem is very much enjoyable

Posted 3 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

3 Months Ago

thank you for a fine review!🌷
warmly, B
Imagery, romance and poetry - always a great combo. Finely expressed poem, Betty. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

A great review, AH, thank you so much!
Warmly, B
Beautiful words, Betty. I enjoyed the read very much. Richest blessings to you and yours! :)

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much for reviewing my poems
Warmly, B🌷
Jerry Ables

4 Months Ago

You're very welcome, Betty! :)
What a lovely poem, painted a perfect picture.

The imagery of catching the moon and stars adds a whimsical and romantic element to your poem.

The poem has a smooth and rhythmic cadence that enhances the romantic atmosphere.

Thank u for sharing,
-Amy

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Amy…thank you for a lovely, whimsical review
Warmly, B🌷
Amy R

5 Months Ago

You're welcome dear.
There is Magic to the Sunrise when Nature wakes and Birds flutter with Wings of hopeful resolutions... we sing with Sparrows and Meadow Larks... while Angels with their Harps guide our Day. I love the Clementine Sky with hues of plum. The last few lines is in celebration of an awakening of a new beginning with a Junior Senator to bring energy and fortitude to the Hope of a better tomorrow. softly, Pat

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Dearest Pat
Thank you for a hopeful resolution…..in your lovely review
Warmly, B🌷
WOWSER!! This is an awesome write, start to finish. You go girl. ~Sharon

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Thanks Sharon, much appreciated!
Warmly, B🌷

I think having now read these words over and over, back on back that this is one of your finest works that so obviously fall outside of your epic @ Bridges End .. I have yet to finish that of course, but I shall .. in the meantime tho' I congratulate you and your pen Betty .. Neville

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Dear Neville
Thank you for your wonderfully inspiring reviews on this series, you are most ap.. read more
Neville

5 Months Ago


am keeping my 🤞well n truly crossed .. 🔥neville
'At dawn they awaken in warm caress
from their dozy eyes they view a clementine
with hues of plum seep through the branches
like a rumba dance they linger in the thick
in fear of the sun’s discontent'

What delicious words, Betty! That is 'open air' theatre at its best, my friend.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Thank you my dear friend, a wonderful review
Hugs,
B
wonderfully expressive. you've captured its essence so well. heartfelt words and imagery.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Thank you Pete, love your review!
Warmly, B
Lovers finding a hidden place to enjoy the embrace of each others touch and nearness. So many wonderful lines in this piece and I enjoyed the descriptions of the sunrise. Beautiful

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Thanks so much PB, appreciated!
Warmly, B🌷
Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

You are welcome. Those secret stolen moments can last a lifetime in our memories
Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Very true!
Warmly, B

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Betty Hermelee
Betty Hermelee

Black Mountain, NC



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My love of poetry results from my love of art. As a painter I am able to express myself on a canvas. As a poet my words come from my heart, my moods, sometimes sad, mostly upbeat. I like to use vivid .. more..

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