A SPECIAL VISIT

A SPECIAL VISIT

A Poem by Betty Hermelee
"

and so it goes....

"

I awaken feeling clammy and with headache

the day is finally here

I shall visit my soldier, long awaited special day

t’s early, I decide to bathe to deep cleanse myself

important to smell delicious for him

excited and scared, I make the water very hot

pour in some bubbles and try to relax for a while

 

I cannot relax! I dry off, put on my lounging gown

and make some tea

then I pace the room all the while to determine

what to say to my love, and at long last I know

 

I am dressed and ready for my cab to take me to the hospital

my anxiety level reaches to the tree tops

and I can view the sun peep through

t’s a bright day, if only my mood mimics

I have rehearsed all my words

yet in my agitation, I may well draw a blank

shops and people wiz by as we near the hospital

I have not had time to do some shopping in these

enticing shops along the way

too much preparation for other important matters

we pass so many stunning churches

the architecture brings a smile to my lips

 

At once, we pull up to the hospital

my hands shake as I try to pull out some money

for the driver

must clear my throat a few times to thank him

there are many steps up to the entrance

massive building I shall say

the  space inside is quite antiseptic, looks new

I inquire where my soldier’s room is located

the receptionist tells me to wait one moment

my heart flutters like a humming bird

I apprise her of his name

she reveals that it is on the seventh floor

war casualties ward

I flinch when I hear that name

my mind’s picture is frightening

 

I step out of the newly installed elevator with tremble

a nurse inquires of my presence

I provide a name and my relationship

she leads me to his room

all the while I sense a weakness in my legs

she opens the door and there are two beds

I can barely recognize who is who

she leads me to his bed

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2024 Betty Hermelee


Author's Note

Betty Hermelee
Thank you for reading....."AT BRIDGES END"

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Another great chapter of your novel...
I very much enjoyed reading this piece.
Well done Betty.
Wondering what the fate of the soldier will be...
Take good care friend. Thank you for sharing.
😃🌹

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much, appreciated!
Warmly, B
PS next episode crucial!
The_Ancient_Rock

4 Months Ago

You are most welcome.
Wow, can hardly wait for it.
🌹
Priestess, Emma, and others have said it better than I could, so I'll just say that it's a fine and sensitive write, full of heart wrenching emotion. To quote the Bible, " "Greater love hath no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends". That is what our service men and women demonstrate every day.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Yes indeed Sam, it wreaks with emotion, told by one person speaking to the reader, thank you for you.. read more
Your narrative poem beautifully captures the mix of emotions and experiences leading up to a poignant moment. The journey begins with a palpable sense of anticipation and nervousness as you prepare yourself for a long-awaited visit to your soldier. The details of bathing and choosing your attire reflect both excitement and anxiety, emphasizing the importance of this occasion.

The internal turmoil and preparations are vividly depicted through pacing, making tea, and rehearsing what to say. These actions convey the depth of your feelings and the significance of the upcoming meeting.

As you travel to the hospital, your anxiety is palpable, contrasting with the bright day outside. The passing scenery and architecture provide a backdrop that adds texture to your journey, highlighting the beauty amidst your inner turmoil.

Upon arriving at the hospital, the atmosphere shifts to one of solemnity and seriousness. The sterile environment and the mention of the "war casualties ward" starkly contrast with your initial anticipation. The tension builds as you navigate through the hospital, your emotions mirroring the uncertainty and fear associated with such visits.

The moment you finally reach your soldier's room is poignant and fraught with emotion. The nurse's guidance to his bedside adds a sense of relief and trepidation as you confront the reality of the situation.

Overall, your poem masterfully captures the emotional rollercoaster of anticipation, anxiety, and eventual arrival, weaving together vivid imagery and introspective narration. It immerses the reader in your journey, evoking empathy and understanding for the complex emotions involved in visiting a loved one in challenging circumstances. Well done!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Dear High Priestess
This is a masterpiece of intricate understanding and a thoughtful review.. read more
Mystical Ink

5 Months Ago

Thank you for providing such a detailed summary! It's clear that the story has many layers and compl.. read more
Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

My pleasure
Warmly B🌷
Alas this was and sadly the case for many girlfriends/fiancee's even wives of soldiers fallen in battle, yes many survived but at the cost of injuy fighting for their respective countries, and despite the lady's aprehension her love clearly unyielding!!

A poignat, powerful poetic tale Betty, kudos!!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Thank you Tom for a very thoughtful review!
Warmly, B
Pins and needles cannot put me together again… the Shadow remains when my eyes begin to twinkle like Bees 🐝 making Honey… 🍯… how Sweet the Moment…. Charmed in His Arms… Amen.. Pat

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Thank you dear Pat...always a sweet review!
Warmly, B
This poem touches my heart, it starts of beautifully with excitement and desperation to meet her lover, to look the best and prepare a sweet moment in mind all the while having the fear of something terrible clutching her heart, I love how she compensates her anxieties with her sightseeings, the beauty of sun and it's brightness contrasting her state of emotions, this poem induced her anxiety into my heart, as she makes way to her lover, the nearer she gets the more agitated she becomes, you have significantly made this poem felt, hoping this rendezvous turned out be a sweet moment. Beautiful poem there. With warm regards ❤️

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

I am honored by your review! This is the 44th episode in this series and you entered as if you had r.. read more
Poetic_Vixen

5 Months Ago

I'm truly glad to learn I was able to catch up. You're very welcome my friend!
I can literally feel her anxiety as I actually suffer from mild anxiety. The heart race, feeling nauseous and shaking like a tree limb is a storm. I feel so sorry for her on this cab ride. I surprised she can speak at all exiting the cab.



Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Thank you PB for your heartfelt comments
Warmly, B🌷
Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

You are welcome
The mood of this part is escalating.. a holding-breath time when anything or all could happen. Trying to guess - or not. No, needing to pause and wait. But oh my goodness, what, WHAT? is going to happen. Methinks the lady is leaving chance to grab her in its arms and.. move along, gently? Or not? Can a man in a hospital bed move his limbs, react how she wants or not.. drum beats, heart beats.. what - under the circumstances - is going to happen now? Can I wait.. have to..

Posted 5 Months Ago


emmajoygreen

5 Months Ago

Two days without cafe.. closed to me, don't know if others too! Hope all's well with you, dear frie.. read more
Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Me too! site was down....All's well....xoxo
emmajoygreen

4 Months Ago

Yes, seems so. Hope life has been good for you and family otherwise! Take care and be happily cont.. read more
A crescendo was built while I was reading this suspenseful poem, story with lots of good detail. Ending was mysterious as I was looking for clues.
You got the style.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Sami Khalil

5 Months Ago

I agree wholeheartedly. Will visit when you post.
Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Thank you!
Sami Khalil

5 Months Ago

::::::))))))))))))
I could see all this continuing (hopefully) story. I could film it and its wonderful atmosphere.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Thank you dear Ken, I wish you would film it!!!
Your review is lovely!
Warmly, B

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Betty Hermelee
Betty Hermelee

Black Mountain, NC



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My love of poetry results from my love of art. As a painter I am able to express myself on a canvas. As a poet my words come from my heart, my moods, sometimes sad, mostly upbeat. I like to use vivid .. more..

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