Another great chapter of your novel...
I very much enjoyed reading this piece.
Well done Betty.
Wondering what the fate of the soldier will be...
Take good care friend. Thank you for sharing.
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Posted 4 Months Ago
4 Months Ago
Thank you so much, appreciated!
Warmly, B
PS next episode crucial!
4 Months Ago
You are most welcome.
Wow, can hardly wait for it.
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Priestess, Emma, and others have said it better than I could, so I'll just say that it's a fine and sensitive write, full of heart wrenching emotion. To quote the Bible, " "Greater love hath no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends". That is what our service men and women demonstrate every day.
Posted 5 Months Ago
5 Months Ago
Yes indeed Sam, it wreaks with emotion, told by one person speaking to the reader, thank you for you.. read moreYes indeed Sam, it wreaks with emotion, told by one person speaking to the reader, thank you for your lovely review!🌷
Warmly, B
Your narrative poem beautifully captures the mix of emotions and experiences leading up to a poignant moment. The journey begins with a palpable sense of anticipation and nervousness as you prepare yourself for a long-awaited visit to your soldier. The details of bathing and choosing your attire reflect both excitement and anxiety, emphasizing the importance of this occasion.
The internal turmoil and preparations are vividly depicted through pacing, making tea, and rehearsing what to say. These actions convey the depth of your feelings and the significance of the upcoming meeting.
As you travel to the hospital, your anxiety is palpable, contrasting with the bright day outside. The passing scenery and architecture provide a backdrop that adds texture to your journey, highlighting the beauty amidst your inner turmoil.
Upon arriving at the hospital, the atmosphere shifts to one of solemnity and seriousness. The sterile environment and the mention of the "war casualties ward" starkly contrast with your initial anticipation. The tension builds as you navigate through the hospital, your emotions mirroring the uncertainty and fear associated with such visits.
The moment you finally reach your soldier's room is poignant and fraught with emotion. The nurse's guidance to his bedside adds a sense of relief and trepidation as you confront the reality of the situation.
Overall, your poem masterfully captures the emotional rollercoaster of anticipation, anxiety, and eventual arrival, weaving together vivid imagery and introspective narration. It immerses the reader in your journey, evoking empathy and understanding for the complex emotions involved in visiting a loved one in challenging circumstances. Well done!
Dear High Priestess
This is a masterpiece of intricate understanding and a thoughtful review.. read moreDear High Priestess
This is a masterpiece of intricate understanding and a thoughtful review; I just wish you could have read the first 43 episodes, so you would have the whole story before you. In short, the protagonist is engaged to her soldier during WW2, she is oceans away from him. On leave, he returns home for a few days and their love heated,, however she always wants more and ruminates about his love-giving and about his goodbyes….she is love- starved….one day she receives a telegram that soldier is injured….. she transports to London on a ship……meet a gentleman, has an affair….all the while very guilty….. she breaks up
Still thinks about him…. ( he slips her a note with his name and address in London) they part ways….. at same time her tummy is growing…. Who is the father? Surmises it’s the soldier….in London confirmed by Dr.that she is pregnant…. What to do? Stays at hotel…. Visits her soldier…..with relief…. Momentarily……and now you’re up to snuff! Next episode is crucial to the story….🌷
Warmly, B
5 Months Ago
Thank you for providing such a detailed summary! It's clear that the story has many layers and compl.. read moreThank you for providing such a detailed summary! It's clear that the story has many layers and complexities. While I regret not having read the first 43 episodes, your summary helps me understand the protagonist's journey and the emotional turmoil she faces. Her longing for her soldier, the affair, and the subsequent pregnancy create a gripping narrative. The next episode indeed sounds pivotal, especially with the uncertainty surrounding the child's paternity and her reunion with her soldier. I'm eager to see how the story unfolds and how she navigates these challenges. Thank you for bringing me up to speed!
Alas this was and sadly the case for many girlfriends/fiancee's even wives of soldiers fallen in battle, yes many survived but at the cost of injuy fighting for their respective countries, and despite the lady's aprehension her love clearly unyielding!!
A poignat, powerful poetic tale Betty, kudos!!
Posted 5 Months Ago
5 Months Ago
Thank you Tom for a very thoughtful review!
Warmly, B
Pins and needles cannot put me together again… the Shadow remains when my eyes begin to twinkle like Bees 🐝 making Honey… 🍯… how Sweet the Moment…. Charmed in His Arms… Amen.. Pat
This poem touches my heart, it starts of beautifully with excitement and desperation to meet her lover, to look the best and prepare a sweet moment in mind all the while having the fear of something terrible clutching her heart, I love how she compensates her anxieties with her sightseeings, the beauty of sun and it's brightness contrasting her state of emotions, this poem induced her anxiety into my heart, as she makes way to her lover, the nearer she gets the more agitated she becomes, you have significantly made this poem felt, hoping this rendezvous turned out be a sweet moment. Beautiful poem there. With warm regards ❤️
Posted 5 Months Ago
5 Months Ago
I am honored by your review! This is the 44th episode in this series and you entered as if you had r.. read moreI am honored by your review! This is the 44th episode in this series and you entered as if you had read all the others, quite amazing; thank you so much; appreciated🌹
Warmly
B.
5 Months Ago
I'm truly glad to learn I was able to catch up. You're very welcome my friend!
I can literally feel her anxiety as I actually suffer from mild anxiety. The heart race, feeling nauseous and shaking like a tree limb is a storm. I feel so sorry for her on this cab ride. I surprised she can speak at all exiting the cab.
Posted 5 Months Ago
5 Months Ago
Thank you PB for your heartfelt comments
Warmly, B🌷
The mood of this part is escalating.. a holding-breath time when anything or all could happen. Trying to guess - or not. No, needing to pause and wait. But oh my goodness, what, WHAT? is going to happen. Methinks the lady is leaving chance to grab her in its arms and.. move along, gently? Or not? Can a man in a hospital bed move his limbs, react how she wants or not.. drum beats, heart beats.. what - under the circumstances - is going to happen now? Can I wait.. have to..
Posted 5 Months Ago
5 Months Ago
Thank you sweet EM for a “ what the heck is going to happen “review…..you are spot on! Much a.. read moreThank you sweet EM for a “ what the heck is going to happen “review…..you are spot on! Much appreciated
Hugs🌷
5 Months Ago
Clever me! You really know how to inspire - patience!
5 Months Ago
Thank you!
5 Months Ago
Always a pleasure. Finding it hard to be patient... and yes, it's a virtue but...
Two days without cafe.. closed to me, don't know if others too! Hope all's well with you, dear frie.. read moreTwo days without cafe.. closed to me, don't know if others too! Hope all's well with you, dear friend?!
4 Months Ago
Me too! site was down....All's well....xoxo
4 Months Ago
Yes, seems so. Hope life has been good for you and family otherwise! Take care and be happily cont.. read moreYes, seems so. Hope life has been good for you and family otherwise! Take care and be happily contented. :)
A crescendo was built while I was reading this suspenseful poem, story with lots of good detail. Ending was mysterious as I was looking for clues.
You got the style.
Posted 5 Months Ago
5 Months Ago
Dear Sami: it's not over!! more episodes to come!
Thank you for a lovely review!
Warml.. read moreDear Sami: it's not over!! more episodes to come!
Thank you for a lovely review!
Warmly, B
My love of poetry results from my love of art. As a painter I am able to express myself on a canvas. As a poet my words come from my heart, my moods, sometimes sad, mostly upbeat. I like to use vivid .. more..