THE KNOCK

THE KNOCK

 

Two days alone in this utterly minute cabin

without proper fresh air and exercise

leaves me with overwhelming feelings of boredom

and listlessness

I perused one book, inept to focus

miss the absence of chatter

waiters who deliver my meals are slim with words

now and then I converse with myself

which I do find quite humorous

 

My sense is ubiquitous

here and there ascending like a wave about to break

I muse often about my quandary

which, as you are aware, is quite complex

I have high hopes that a reunion with my soldier

shall be splendid

yet my journey so far troubles me

as the gentleman is still and all in my recall

this fuels me so that I may neglect to put an end to it

my early dawn walks on the deck refuse to ameliorate the disorder

in my psyche

                      

T'is ten o’clock in the evening and I try to finish my book

when I hear a knock on the door

I leap up then sit down

my body shivers

another knock

thankfully I am robed in my lounging gown

shall I open the door?

my thoughts are like a hurricane

as wind blows one way and then another

t'is rude to ignore it

I gasp as I observe the gentleman

then smile

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading: another episode in the series "At Bridges End"

Reviews

[Gee]

This can only lead to one thing Betty...banking:))
Reads like an old time wordsmith has inhabited your mind.
Again very well written

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Gee, you read many of my work, and I appreciate it very much….all the best
Warmly,read moreThanks Gee, you read many of my work, and I appreciate it very much….all the best
Warmly,
B.

[grace]

Wow. This is so beautifully written. It perfectly captures the emotions of solitude and longing. The ending with the unexpected visit of your soldier adds a touch of anticipation and is pretty sweet. I really enjoyed it!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Grace for a thoughtful review
Warmly
B.

[Rachid Amrani]

Beautifully written. Your poem Rymes like a beautiful symphony. Every word every line planted in my mind vivid pictures of things happening and precious moments until the wind blew and then a gentleman and then a smile. You choice of words is magnificent. It shows that every thought you ink is coming from the depth of the heart.

[Betty Hermelee]

Please excuse the delay…I loved your review, very thoughtful….thank you, much appreciated!
Warmly,
B.

[Rachid Amrani]

It was a pleasure.

[emmajoygreen]

The language you use is more than a walk into a time, a time when danger is lurking rather than a mild interest in a polite conversation, Betty! Strangely however, I want the tale to go on and on rather than behave. You, my friend, have reached the point of teasing this reader!

[Betty Hermelee]

Exactly!!! my intentions EM...however it will move on, you'll see...Thank you friend for your review,
much appreciated
XOXO B

[emmajoygreen]

Believe me, will be back for more.. and more! Hugs.

[Betty Hermelee]

Indeed! xoxo

[Lisasview]

Oh hi the Betty, Trying to make real heads or tails of this... So as it is getting late here in Spain I plan to revisit your words tomorrow.. Has a feeling oh the Titanic... and a feeling of a short story...but as I say I will check it again in the morning,
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

no worries Lisa, it is a long series ... I call it poetic prose.... basically it is a romance between two people who are engaged;he goes off to war(WW 1) and she is left lonely and doubting his real love for her; he is injured in the war months later and ends up in a hospital in London; she feels the needs to be there beside him so she books herself on a ship....meanwhile on the voyage, she meets a gentleman at dinner the first night... they see each other again; she now is conflicted because she thinks she may have feelings for him since she's lonely...her mental conflict goes on and she decides not to see him again and locks herself up in her cabin...all the while going back and forth between her fiancee and the gentleman...he knock oh her cabin door...and then....
Warmly, B

[Lisasview]

Fabulous Betty...and actually I know of that type of story well...
My sister was traveling through Europe in the 70's and met a man from Austria... they then traveled together for quite some time... She then came home to Hollywood, California..BUT on her way home she met a man at the airport in Chicago and fell in love...so when the man from Austria arrived she told him that she cared for him but not enough to marry him. The story goes on... because he wanted to become a U.S. citizen by getting married and one thing led to another and he ended up marrying my sisters best girlfriend... and they stayed married.... I am not sure if at first she loved him but over time she fell in love.... Last week he past away...
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

Glad you know the "meat" of it now...thanks for relating your story, sad ending....
Warmly,read moreGlad you know the "meat" of it now...thanks for relating your story, sad ending....
Warmly,
B

[Ken Simm.]

Classic. I love certain phrases in this timeless tale. Like inept to focus. Says so much and really sets the scene which I see as historic. Somewhere inter war perhaps. Whatever it is classic and rather exciting in a very romantic way.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you my dear friend Ken
you are spot on with your review, much appreciated.
Warmly, B

[Pete]

in a deep and complex way, you have woven so much into a seemingly simple, mundane scene. there's not much more suspenseful than an unexpected knock ... :)

"my thoughts are like a hurricane
as wind blows one way and then another"

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank Pete for a thoughtful review...it is complex, because she is complex! or crazy!
Warmly, B

[Arundass TP]

I see millions of stars in that smile after opening the door hearing knocks. A great suspense

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your starlit review, much appreciated
Warmly
B

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

The part where you hear a knock on the door and the internal struggle of whether to open it or not is quite gripping. Your description of your thoughts being like a hurricane, blowing one way and then another, adds a sense of tension and anticipation.
It truly captures the complexities of life and the emotions that come with it. Well done 👍

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for a very insightful review…
Warmly,
B

[Ken e Bujold]

An intoxicating brew Betty. Captivating. Your opening V so spot on to the ennui of being confined inside a cabin, when nothing seems capable of overriding the continuous wake of waves. Not even those slim waiters with their scanty lines. All building up to the senses sudden stirring to other waves

ken

[Betty Hermelee]

Stunning review Ken, you capture it so well… and I thank you immensely…
Happy holidaysread moreStunning review Ken, you capture it so well… and I thank you immensely…
Happy holidays
Warmly, B