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UNVEILED

A Poem by Betty Hermelee
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Developments at sea

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As I meander to my cabin

A bit tipsy, I might say

Befuddled from the demeanor

In the dining room

I, unerringly, slump on the bed

My mind disordered

With a faint headache

 

I drift off for some time

Later, as I dress in my bed clothes

A sudden notion dawns upon me

What is the next phase with this gentleman?

Who seems to be infatuated with me

A long voyage is ahead

Shall I disengage with him promptly?

Or quieten down and keep calm?

I prefer not to pain him

 

The captain’ s dinner terrifies me

As I shall be unveiled with my shipmates

Observing now two at the table

With chit chat at hand

 

Oh, pity me

Why did I return that smile?

First and foremost

I shall not chastise myself

My only desire is to arrive safely in London

And go straight on to hospital

Where my darling soldier shall be surprised to see me

If I sleep well tonight

I may awaken with a different mindset

About the captain’s dinner

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


© 2023 Betty Hermelee


Author's Note

Betty Hermelee
Will be away for a few days, please forgive me if I don't respond right away
Thank you for reading the series "At Bridges End"

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Seems your protagonist is going to be torn between two men very soon and will need to keep her wits about her. The unknown stranger is always tempting so it may well become an extreme battle between the heart and mind. At least a long journey allows one plenty of time to think, yet equally, it does make it difficult to avoid any further confrontations with the unknown stranger. A compelling narrative with an intriguing premise and an outcome yet to be determined.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

A very thoughtful review, and spot on!
Thank you, much appreciated
Warmly, B
Hi Betty, I need Appa’s wishes too for my startup, as it is not going ahead. And My dear hubby I know you works hard to satisfy everyone but never undermines me and my work, you is the ultimate source of energy and success for my endeavors, touch your both feet 👣. Dear father, Leader of the family who leads tirelessly the family my loves 😍 and my sweet hugs to my dear sister-in-law.🤗, my love ❤️. Dear princess 👑 my beloved loves❤️❤️ to you hope you don’t make mom run impatient with your little naughtiness like your mama/uncle.
Hope you come back soon Betty, I am just worried you are fine.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your kind review!
Warmly, B
JessyJacob

1 Year Ago

Nice to see your reply Betty, I don’t want you to get troubled at this age, you have seen so many .. read more
Ooooooo I just love the feel of this! It is captivating! That is ok that you will be away for awhile, you're forgiven dear friend! :) Can't wait for what comes next. BTW I love the pic! It is perfect for the poem and the atmosphere of the write!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

Hi P. I' m back, and happy to read your review...
always great and appreciated..
Hugs .. read more
Oh this is so atmospheric. A classic romance writ so well. I really enjoyed this piece of anti bellum writing.
I will use the time you are away to peruse the other pieces in this series.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

thank you Ken for a lovely review....warmly, B
PS start with "At Bridges End" and continue wi.. read more
Still intriguing my friend. Can't wait to see what happens at the Captain's Dinner

Posted 1 Year Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

Thanks for a perfect review!
Warmly, B
I want to read the other parts of this so I can have more understanding about the captain and this woman's journey. But I feel an understanding with wanting to sleep away troubles and not always resting easy with the journey ahead. Nothing ever goes as planned but I hope she makes it to her planned destination with love in her heart.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your kind review….this is a series of poetic prose, a story of love and war and inte.. read more
Led first of all by your great visual - lucky find, Betty!.

Then of course, you follow through in your own fine way, placing appropriate words in the tone and time of your travels.

Seems in spite of your soldier, you are a woman beneath those garments, that look - and refinement! Hmmmn.. .. Will be interesting to read the next par, will you dare or not; rather think i know, knowing the you between the words.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

I think you may well know, but I’m not even sure!
Thank you always Em for a spot on reviews.. read more
emmajoygreen

1 Year Ago

I really need to be patient! Sleep calls me now. Find you come Wednesday!
dearest Betty... we surely have all been mystified by Smiles on the Ocean Sea... as the Waves of discontent and worry bring Dreams that haunt us... as we near the Bridges end. deeply, Pat

Posted 1 Year Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

So poetic, thank you dear friend….
Warmly,
B.
The reflection on a returned smile and the desire to prioritize personal well-being while considering the feelings of the other person highlights the complexity of their situation. It conveys a mix of vulnerability, inner dialogue, and anticipation for what's to come.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

Thi is a beautiful review, very thoughtful
Thank you!
Warmly, B
The feeling is that our heroine is somewhat enchanted by the stranger's advances. She is uncomfortable about the captain's dinner, but why? If the gentleman gets too forward, all she has to do is tell him to kiss off. I wonder if she fears not being able to do so.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

I think she’s in a quandary! We’ ll see; thanks so much for a fine review
Warmly, B.

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