CONCEALED

the meeting

CONCEALED

 

Amid the first scanty seconds

We nip our libations

Entirely concealed in our own momentary notions

In wait for one of us to speak

He invites me to join for a smoke

Yet I gracefully decline

 

Our conversation is pleasant and reserved

I waver as to how much I am willing to share

He cannot apprise too much about me

as my fingers are bare

a precaution against loss or theft

I shall never mention  my wounded soldier

I solely speak  of my impending holiday in London

He discloses his plans to meet up with friends and

Eventually sojourn to the beach

 

After three glasses of champagne

I detect my eyes at half mast

And begin to giggle like a silly old fool

He grins at me as if he is entertained

By my idiotic self

 

Tis after midnight, the waiter arrives

And hands him our bill

I reach to snatch it from him

Yet he insists to pay with a gentle smirk

I thank him for the intoxicants

And offer a nod to leave

 

He insists on walking me to my cabin

I blush  and  politely decline

Though I must say the persuasion lasts a few seconds

Before we part, he  formally invites

Me to the Captain’s dinner

I reply, perhaps

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

series> At Bridges End
Thank you for reading!

Reviews

[AYVID N]

I love the way you detailed the evening. The protagonist was so prudent and careful in all her actions and revelations and that's how it should be. No wonder he seems to be so smitten by her. A touch of modesty and an aura of mystique are so attractive in a woman. Dear Betty, I loved this part and I can't wait to read the next. This is such a beautiful series!

[Betty Hermelee]

I prize your review Divya ….thank you my friend for such a thoughtful well expressed review, so glad you’re enjoying it..
Warmly, B

[John the Baptist]

Our heroine, en route to meet her wounded soldier, has encountered a nice looking stranger in the ship's restaurant. He has invited her to his table, where they engage in pleasant conversation. She is reserved, does not mention the reason for her trip, is aware she is not wearing her ring. After three drinks, she is feeling her liquor, and he quickly picks up the check. He also insists on walking her to her cabin. She declines, but he is persistent, inviting her to the Captain's dinner. I get the feeling of a shark who smells blood in the water.

[Betty Hermelee]

Well John , you may be right or not, depends where my mind takes me…thank you so much for your spot on review!
Warmly, B

[W. Barrett Munn]

I don’t know, Betty. I’m beginning to think this girl is not convoluted but knows exactly what she is doing and enjoys being the torturer.
We used to call them teases.

Winston

[Betty Hermelee]

for sure, but don't forget she's been alone for a long time1!! Thank you for your review!
Warmly, B

[Soren]

A convincing snapshot of a moment in time a temptation overcome and hopes for the future. Well written and capturing of interest and charm.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Soren, much appreciated!
Warmly, B

[willweb]

Perhaps, one of my favorite words because 9 times out of 10, it means yes. Nice one Betty

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Will appreciate always
Warmly, B

[Farjana Chaity]

The careful dance of words and gestures, along with the unspoken intentions, creates an air of mystery and allure, a beautiful piece ~ chaity

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for a lovely review
Best, Betty

[Farjana Chaity]

you are welcome, Betty.

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Betty… the danger can be exciting; however, a safety Net is a Wise decision… gently, Pat

[Betty Hermelee]

in real life yes; but all of this is made up dear Pat
Thank you for another upbeat review!!!
Warmly, B

[Chris Shaw]

A chance meeting on board ship. The champagne is flowing nicely. The final stanza builds with anticipation and then leaves the reader pondering on what is to follow. Thoroughly enjoyed the description and ambience in this write Betty. Well penned.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear Chris...keep hanging!
Warmly, B

[JessyJacob]

Dear Betty, I like the title, I know the traits one never accepts, my wounded soldier, my only love, my only man, who I really adore, I like the strong word idiotic self, I thought I was open book, but now it’s clear we should speak and feel the touch, and shades do hide the deep inside, I was just wondering how is the short tempered traited from I don’t think so yours, might be it is his style of hurting, the best med for that is my short term memory loss. I know the nice treatment. I am little bit scared but not worried I am the basket for his throw up.

[JessyJacob]

Missed you talking all these days was keeping to myself not to mention.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Jessy!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"He is entertained by my idiotic self"
I like that.
and the cliffhanger ending.
Perhaps...

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you J...glad you caught the good ones!
Warmly, B