WHITE CAPS

it's safe to stay where you are, but dubious to adventure anew

WHITE CAPS

Teal blue ocean shrouds me with euphoria

your white caps lap over my corps with fervor

kiss my cheeks with salty foam

tickle my toes with bubbles

pervade my mind with ebullient energy

still, I am securely netted in someone else’s being

yet my obsession prevails with you, darling sea

I will rejoin you with fire when I catch an opening

Reviews

[Ken Simm.]

Just returned from the western isles where I felt every bit of this lovely poem. I can still feel the wind through it.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Ken, much appreciated!!!
Warmly, B

[Lorry]

Ahh, the call of the sea. The waves, the beach and the putting on of oil, only for a slight gust to gently blow and turn you into a walking donut... I'd love the sea if it didn't insist on being near the beach! 😊

[Betty Hermelee]

I guess you don't like your toenails touching the sand!
Thank you dear Lorry; you're just so clever!
Warmly, B

[Lorry]

Of course I don't! And who enjoys the bucket of sand you empty from your shoes when you take them off! Beaches should be banned, especially in cold countries, where they are only useful for walking your dog anyway, and even then, only if it's done briskly enough 😊

[Betty Hermelee]

agreed!! no beaches in cold country!
Warmly, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

reminds me of the song "Brandy" by Looking Glass...
he sings, "Brandy you're a fine girl, what a good wife you would be, but my life, my love and my lady is the sea."
Really tickles my poetic toes here.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you J... glad it tickled you!
Warmly, B

[W. Barrett Munn]

Hi, Betty,

One thing I notice about the construction of this poem: the first two lines are not in agreement with the next lines, meaning in the first two lines you are talking about the ocean then in the rest of the poem you are speaking to the ocean. Would it make more sense to also adress the ocean in the opening two lines?
Teal blue ocean you shroud me/your white caps.

Just suggesting,

Winston

[Betty Hermelee]

thank you W. I will change that to "your"
Best, B

[Betty Hermelee]

DONE thanks

[willweb]

Beautiful Betty and just where I wish I were right now and not at work. : )

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks, glad you took time off to peek at this!
Warmly, B