SUSPENSION

to reason or not

SUSPENSION

 

My innards suspend on a clothespin

lilting in the draft

seizing every chance to sizzle my nerves

toss my being into turmoil

puzzle my psyche

 

While reason and soundness

drape from the point of a star

too far to touch, out of reach

what does reason expect of me?

when will I be tempted to color

my moods?

 

Perhaps if I gaze at this star

as it glitters in the darkness

alas, she shall raise up

my broken spirit, dissolve it

so intensely needful

settle with reason

fabricate me into an undamaged entity

Reviews

[Fran Marie]

Some deep emotions set forth
within the lines of this well .
penned piece .
we do tend color our moods
don't we? at some point we
are damage in this thing called life
maybe wishing ' pon stars isn't
half bad...lovely verse..

Nice work!

[Betty Hermelee]

Welcome and thank you for a heartfelt review!
Warmly,,
B

[Andra Dare]

Betty, this is a moving and powerful piece with potent imagery. Thank you for sharing.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome and thanks for stopping by
Best, B

[FGFRANKLIN]

WOW! This is fabulous! It's so deep and personal and relatable with all the frailty of the human condition exposed; laid bare, blowing in the wind, so to speak. It moves the reader with empathy and the urge to assure the author they are not alone in their musings or trepidation. This is a favorite of mine. Excellent write. F.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poetry dear Betty. I hope we can rise-up stronger. I liked how you used the language to make your point. I believe hard days make us stronger. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[willweb]

You know Betty, I think if we hang around long enough, there is no telling the feelings, the emotions, the love and the loss we will feel. And believe me, I have been hanging around for quite a while. I haven't seen or felt it all but there isn't much I haven't experienced. Nicely done my friend.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear Will, an upbeat review , this too shall pass....my friend
Warmly, B

[Akinlolu]

What reason expects isn't always what mood dictates. It's one of the reasons why we live with regrets about our past actions. This is such a very personal piece. A good day to you.
Akinlolu

[Betty Hermelee]

and you as well, and thank you for a sincere review!
Best, B

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Betty... wooden clothespins are special to me...
I spent many years hanging clothes outdoors...
now I use them to clip my thoughts together
Have a lovely day. softly, Pat p.s. I wrote a poem for Memorial Day.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear Pat for a warm-hearten review.
Warmly
B

[Chris Shaw]

A fabulous metaphor here Betty. I have periods of time when I am constantly on edge. That peg and that feeling is familiar. That’s when I look to the heavens where I find some freedom of spirit. This is a fav of mine now. So relatable. So well penned Betty. Kudos.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear Chris for a sincere, lovely review
means a lot to me.
Warmly, B

[AYVID N]

I loved this poem because this is so me, most days. That clothespin is such a beautiful metaphor for the pinching the gripping one feels inside. Where is reason? Where is soundness? I often wonder as I long for seasons of colour in my head. The stars can uift and heal one back to wholeness, if only one cared to gaze upwards and not within. I do realize that in my lucid moments but reasoning with oneself is not easily done. This is a most beautifully intense and insightful poem and one that elicited a lot of thought in me. Loved the picture too. Kudos Betty!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you my dear Divya... yes I'm still on that clothes pin and your thoughts are so sincere; i feel better already, thank you so much for your empathetic and kind review
warmly
B xo

[Lorry]

There is a famous Scottish film called Gregory's girl, that for some reason has stood te test of time from the eighties. It's about a bunch of schoolkids and the accents are indecipherable to most without subtitles, but Gregory's girl, turns out not to be the one he had his eye on and one of the girls who sets him up is asked to lie down and dance by Gregory. This isn't a euphemism for sex, but to lie on the grass and dance with the stars.
If you ever need your spirits lifted, try it. You will be certain to smile, I assure you.
That is a long way for a short cut to say that is what I instantly thought of reading your words.
If I had a psychiatrist, I'd be due a refund! 😊

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=naGZvVVSynM

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear Lorry for that special review
Warmly, B