A CUPFUL OF PLEASANT

a special evening

A CUPFUL OF PLEASANT

 

As of late I agonize

about my memory decline

as though my mind stifles in a prisoner’s cell

words drift and obscure

arduous to retrieve

conversations broken

not smooth like a laminated table

alone, I speak to myself

words flow like a melodious stream

I am distressed about my waning life

isolated in an old woebegone cabin by the sea

 

At once, my scratched wooden windows rattle

and abruptly catch my focus

as I peer out to uncover

wind carries the aqua waves at speed

a strange, mysterious evening

 

White caps swell in chaotic gestures

as though in storm

yet the yellow-hued moon

glimpses through cumulus clouds

to alight the jagged sea

 

In the distance

I discern a sailboat at tilt

bobs on the intense current

I wonder why one would sail

in such a turbulent swell?

though at close aspect

I would designate this night

as remarkable

an abstraction of evening’s magic

light from the heavens is so distinct

it brings life to a painted canvas

 

If I pass on tonight

I will have witnessed

the most divine panorama

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[willweb]

I am not sure which I preferred more, the painting or the poetry as they both were absolutely wonderful. And I can relate as I feel I have seen the most amazing sites one could see in a lifetime and if tonight is to be my night, then I go happily.

[Betty Hermelee]

Very thoughtful review, much appreciated.
Best, Betty

[Coyote Poetry]

The poetry was so wonderful dear Betty. I loved how you described the wild sea. You allowed the reader see the storm. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome dear John
Best, B

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Betty… ready in a 💜 Heartbeat to keep the Ocean Waves within my reach as the Spray touches my Cheek… a Kiss of Eternity… Always, Pat

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Pat for a lovely review!
Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I do really like this piece, Betty...I am reminded of "Message in a Bottle."

that haunting sea, the turbulent swell...and then silence.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Glad I didn't disappoint you!
Thank you J, much appreciated
Best, B

[John the Baptist]

I can't testify as to your memory, but your written words here are quite sharp. The description of the sea at night is very vivid. We can almost see the jagged waves and the boat that is being tossed upon them. The whole scene has an almost mystical feeling about it. The last verse communicates the compensatory quality of this vision.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks John for a lovely review; words are sharp but my brain isn't so....aging ain't for nothin!!!
Best, B

[Robert Haigh]

A scene full of tension, melancholy and mystery, well depicted with well chosen words! It ends on an uplifting note, even though the sense of melancholy is still there. A most interesting write!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much Robert for a thoughtful review!
Best, B

[Dave Brown]

nicely done as usual
that painting looks quite similar to one mt grandmother did eons ago
it too is nicely done

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Dave for great review; the painting isn't mine!
BESTB

[Miss Sharon]

What an awesome write my dear. Perfect mood for Halloween. You are a gifted writer. Not just talented, but gifted! ~Sharon

[Betty Hermelee]

Aww Sharon , you're too kind!!! Thank you so much for your review!!!
Best, B

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

A lovely portrait and dreamlike quality in this poem that captures the reader's mind and attention. Such a lovely pice of poetry B. I have come to expect no less from a talented writer as you. CLE

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much dear poet! Much appreciated
Best, B

[W. Barrett Munn]

This is quite the tale beginning with worry and self-absorption then transforming into a mystical experience that transports self into an acceptance. And it reads beautifully.

Winston

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much Winston! Much appreciated!
Best, B