SHADOWS

a farewell...

SHADOWS

As the loaded ferry exits from the dock

his face fades, melts into the sea and sky

A sense of loss dangles in the humid air

nought matters as she dabs a drop from her eye

as if a deep vacuum shrouds her listless body

she gazes out to a desolate sea on end

time is meaningless, though nightfall greets

poetry is her nearest friend

in part, due to her soul's vacuity

she harvests her words

in love letters to her sailor boy

fervor gushes from her pen

ink seeps on her dainty fingers

she scribes from midnight until dawn

emotions unrestrained

the last line with her head on the pillow

nearly scrawl, unsigned, though he perceives

exhaustion thrashes her core

eyelids flutter

and close to a deep slumber

Author's Note

Thank you for reading!

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

Perchance to dream... when Shakespeare may appear... be still and sleep until the "twelfth of never". tenderly, Pat

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank for for such a poetic review!!!!
Truly, B

[Misterr Remeat]

Haven't been here for awhile and I find this gem. Most awesome!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much for stopping by and reviewing my poem, most appreciated!
Betty

[W. Barrett Munn]

I really like the tone you managed in this one, the sense of missing is palpable. I question the diction and syntax of the third line(dangle feels awkward to me): if you reverse that line and begin with “The humid air”could that lead to a less awkward line? Just my take, You don’t have to agree. :-)
W.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

This has that beautiful, deep flair your poetry always has. It seemed extra strong here and I loved the way you described writing. I know I’ll always connect with a fellow poet when they talk about writing poetry like this. You understood the full form and how therapeutic it is and how ecstasy-like it is to get your words on pages. The love the woman feels here is strong and shines through the pages. The structure is great and the emotions are just beautiful. Thank you for sharing!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Cat, a beautiful review!!! So appreciated!
Best, B

[Tertia]

I like the way the poem is divided into two verses, departure and writing - action and reaction, this makes sense and it gives it good structure and easy to read

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for a thoughtful review!

[W. Barrett Munn]

Quite a powerful and descriptive turn in this piece. It shows the essence of anguish of the sense of loss. Very well done

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for a thoughtful review
Best, B

[Dave Brown]

it sounds like this an unwanted, emotional departure
Unfortunately, life can sometimes get in the way
On the lighter side, this was the first time I'd seen the word vacuity used
Living in an area overrun with ferries, I enjoyed the image and hope she realizes that ferries also bring loved ones back again

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for a lovely review Dave!!!
BESTB