SPLASH FROM THE DEEP

rising to the top

SPLASH FROM THE DEEP

 

My muse speaks of ….

 

The downfall of my cloud-gray psyche

soaked, drips of sorrow

bottomless pit of despair

of my own faults

 

She takes note of the orange moon

radiant stars

sanctions worthy spirits

which will splash from the deep

 

Blue befits an opalescent violet

of dusk and dawn

in lieu of interstellar blue of far planets

and unfathomable oceans

 

Yield to illumination of life

sense the yellow-green hue of pastures

wild medley of blossoms

hark to symphonies of song birds

heed the eerie of ghosts, though harmless

 

Enamor with a pleasing maiden

coalesce, reveal your sincerity

think back to the dark depths

and never retreat twice over.

Author's Note

Thank for reading

Reviews

[W. Barrett Munn]

This diction choices work so well with the syntax that it is just a pleasure to read without need of an understanding - it produces a feelings, which is high praise for any poem. Congrats, Betty.
W.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so for you thoughtful review, much appreciated...
Best, B

[William Michael Reeves]

I'm enamored with this medley of color. The 'blue befits' stanza was amazing! Poetic gold! We need a telescope that can search the deepest waters. We might find even more amazing things than we find in the sky!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you WM for your lovely review! much appreciated.
Best, B

[Chris Shaw]

Your muse is using pens of many colours Betty. If she can lift you from the doldrums then I say she is a blessing.

Hark to symphonies of song birds and I say, yes please to that. Nice writing dear Betty.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your lovely review!
Best, B

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Very vibrant and enjoyable imagery within this piece of your heart set to pen of page, Betty ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your kind review!

[Robert Haigh]

Rising from the depths can be a scary and dangerous undertaking. We can soon find ourselves flying or swimming beyond our reach, or out of our depth. But when the muse calls we have to try! Sometimes we can surprise ourselves, and achieve things we never thought ourselves capable of! I can relate to this poem, Betty! I'm sure many others can too! You made a big artistic splash here!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Robert for an excellent review!
Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

those depths can be visited once....but I doubt we want to revisit....even though the memories are good food for writing...
and it is so much easier to write Blue than Happy, isn't it?

[Betty Hermelee]

Yes indeed! Thank you J. For a fine review
Best, B

[Dave Brown]

any time a write gets past the bread and butter category , I am usually lost.
in this particular scenario I can at least see the connection between artist and poet.
I enjoyed the many color references and hope there were no injuries involved bestB

[Betty Hermelee]

It was the muse who urged rising from the depths to engage in life! Thanks for your review Dave
read moreIt was the muse who urged rising from the depths to engage in life! Thanks for your review Dave
BestB.

[alanwgraham]

Wow Betty! This seems a real 'splash from the deep' for you and I think you are trying something a bit more abstract. It is choc full of lovely images! I wish I had the courage and ability to try something like this.
All the best,
Alan

[Betty Hermelee]

What a lovely review Alan, much appreciated!
Best, B