A SONOROUS BREATH

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A SONOROUS BREATH

 

The sun awakens from a restless sleep

Strains to ascend in primordial day.

 

Leaves dance to a sprightly birdsong

A momentary wind stirs them

Dark green to sunlight’s reflection

they evince their blush so artistically

 

I embody this wind

A sonorous breath floods my lungs

And, for a quick second

My heart skips a beat

It sparks a fleeting fright

Until I keep in mind my yesteryear

 

I recall these tango beats

Decades ago

When my lover would fondle my core

These were remarkable instants

The innocence of our kinship

 

We shared not an epoch courtship

He was snatched from part of me

In the First World War

Countless years

My heart has not flickered

Up till this day, this instant

Brings to mind the wind

The waltzing leaves and his irrefutable caress

 

 

Reviews

[Vertigo Cat1111]

The imagery and visuals in these words are splendid. It doesn’t even feel like reading, it just feels like experiencing and living the emotions that created this poem in the first place. It has a perfect amount of intense emotion, portrayed through words so well. Each line feels important and the last few lines especially tie it together so well. Thank you so much for sharing.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank s so much for thoughtful review!!!

[Einstein Noodle]

deeply personal feel to this .. to have loved so brightly so long ago and not since is triply sad says i! i want to say i am sorry for your loss .. the write seems to tenderly personal .. so i will just say it is very sad those decades lived without such special love and partnership
E.
ps. great title in my opinion .. and it's use as the speaker embodies it .. and i also especially like the birds singing the leaves to dancing!! brilliant says i!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Einstein for you amazing review!!!
Best, B

[Throwing Romeo]

Less of a read and more of
a tender embodied state
of being every time I've
experience these words.

Thanx for sharing,
R.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for stopping by to review my poem.
Best, Betty

[Robert Haigh]

Love can be sad, and can cause great pain - especially if the object of our affections is taken from us during an act of war. Sadly, this has happened to millions of people over the years. A highly poignant poem, and an artistically well-constructed one also!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Robert, much appreciated.
Best, Betty

[Lisasview]

Ahhh, romance dear Betty... such a lovely piece of writing... such engaging words of yours portray the feelings so well.
Wars, no matter when have destroyed many budding romances..
Thank you for sharing your lovely poem...
Lisa, afternoon in Spain

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Lisa, much appreciated!
Best, B

[Ranger Kessel]

A very spirited love portaged here. Love everlastings is so beautiful thanks for sharing

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you, much appreciated!

[Ranger Kessel]

Your welcome

[John the Baptist]

War has a bad habit of abruptly ending romances. The speaker here is one now advanced in age, who can yet recall the enchantment she felt briefly for a young man who was taken away, like too many, by WW1. I imagine there were many woman, now long gone, who experienced similar memories.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you John for a thoughtful review!
Best, B

[Patricia Wedel]

Wow... you are a perennial flower that blooms every Year...
now suddenly we have unusual unexpected Winds that touch you deeply as though thunder and lightening could bring back YesterYear. Your poetry is an awakening of coming events where Worlds collide and and Spirits appear... It brings Teardrops a year or two later. Politics are crumbling and disturbing. Yesterday and Today we had Pouring Rain that flooded for an hour and suddenly stopped. It became very Dark for about thirty Minutes and then the Sun came out very Bright.... especially today, June 12, 2022.
We live in Virginia. There were unusual Storms in Florida and the Carolinas were hit with lots of Rain. We must be prepared and believe that there is a Power greater than Politics and Wars. This is my humble feeling. gently, Pat

[Betty Hermelee]

Dearest Pat, your review is a poem unto itself, just lovely.
Thank you dearly,
B.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Okay....highest marks for using "evince" in a poem...great word.

Oh this gets so sad....No epoch courtship...damn wars...damn wars.
great write, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you great teacher and mentor!!! Makes me smile!
Best, B

[Patricia]

So very beautiful and touching and I could easily put myself and an old love in this piece, that is impressive cuz that doesn’t happen often for me. You are a talented poet Miss B!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Miss P, You and J are my mentors here and I got highest marks from both of you!
Hugs, B

[Patricia]

Well j. I understand but me, nah I’m just an expressionist, and you my dear friend are terrific!

[Betty Hermelee]

AND SO ARE YOU!!!! xo HUGS

[Patricia]

:D. You are so sweet!