COLORFUL PSYCHE

RED, BLUE YELLOW = moods

COLORFUL PSYCHE

 

My psyche appears to

mock the speed of a falling star

racing toward earth

 

I strain to classify my brain

in blocks of colors

red for confusion, clutter, calamity

blue for gloom, grief, grouchy

yellow for hope, hiatus, heal

 

At this moment my red chamber

displays its ugliest head

I toil to retrieve words

the creative ones

that will sanction me to quill a poem

 

When I speak about clutter

i mean to assert that I carry out too many tasks simultaneously

my red chamber detonates

my mind shuts 

as I exhaust my neurons            

Regardless, the blue hues are equally unsightly

as I stump, lumber along, alone in a void

pause, reckon that will lessen the gloom

 

Sometimes its weeks in the dusk

I long for my yellow veil to shroud me in calm

I stir to see a fracture of light

Which may imply that I am cleansed once more

of my red and blue dispositions

Perhaps I’ve learned a lesson

 

Reviews

[Fran Marie]

Love how you use colors
to describe stages / moods
of life ..i think colors do affect
how we feel' like restaurants
use a lot colors in decor
like reds while doctors use greens
I like the way you wrote this
very well crafted piece of poetry

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much Fran, I really am a colorist in art, which I guess fliws with poetry too.
Best
B.

[Aura]

Lovely, it's so interesting how you use different colors to represent your mood and you expertly show how our moods can be unpredictable. Especially the line " Sometimes its weeks in the dusk, I long for my yellow veil to shroud me in calm" showing that some emotions don't show up for weeks. Very interesting way to explain the human psyche and the unpredictability of emotions.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for visiting, and reviewing my poem, a very in-depth review.
Best, Betty

[Aura]

My pleasure

[lifejunkie]

Wow. I feel a bit stunned. This really spoke to me, where I'm at in life, the things I'm figuring out at long last. The little touches, too: the offset line that felt like crashing a bit and slowing to a crawl, all the primary colours that to me suggested if I could get a hold of the three things in my life everything would fall into place, and the interplay between them.

I've been frequenting poetry sites since the mid-90s, and I know that is just a naked appeal to authority, but I honestly rarely come upon a write this good, this meant for me to be reading right now in life. Just superb, I feel very lucky, blessed, to have come across this. I used to have an account here for about a decade way back when but gave my writing as I thought it was unhealthily a release for my emotions that kept me from dealing with things that needed dealing with, but I'm in a place where I feel like I'm on top of thing for the first time so I can write again, and I am sooo glad I sign up just when I did to get this poem in my feed.

I want to shower with superlives, but I know words with fail me in describing just how deeply this grabbed me and how hard. Great write!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This was poetically written! Love the imagery used! This was fun to read. Each color expressed each mood a person could feel! Loved it!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much!!!
Best, B

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

My pleasure!

[KAREN]

I loved it! And boy I can relate to these kinds of moods, and I only hope I can learn a lesson.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for your lovely review.
Best, B

[KAREN]

My pleasure!

[cheyenne s garcia]

How fun this was to read. Great work.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you! Why was it fun to read?? what enlightened your attention???
Best, B

[cheyenne s garcia]

I was thoroughly amused. You are great with painting a picture with words. I think you are brilliant and could go mainstream even. Nice!

[Robert Haigh]

An inventive and poetic write, Betty, written and constructed with a painter's eye! I never really think of colours when I am writing. Obviously I find certain colours more soothing or relaxing than others, but I am often attracted to brighter, primary colours. I enjoyed the read - an excellent poem!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Robert, appreciate it.
Best, Betty

[Chris Shaw]

I have to say Betty that purple and lilac hues are calming for me and are best for assisting me with my writing. Too many bright colours like reds, oranges just do my head in. They are my chaos colours. Greens and blues, restful and nearer to nature. I enjoyed your poem and the journey you took me on. Have a good Monday Betty. All the best. Love the posted image to go with your colourful words.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for a lovely review, dear Chris.
appreciate it!
Truly, B.

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Betty… your mind is very Colorful as you capture the feelings that come your way. The beauty of the Sunrise with orchid and yellow Notes of a concerto that soothes a sad and gloomy sky. Blessings will be given to those who smile. tenderly, Pat

[Betty Hermelee]

I knew you would like the muted colors best; I guess maybe violet is soothing enough.... Thank for a lovely review. Truly, B.

[JE Falcon]

"My psyche appears to
mock the speed of a falling star
racing toward earth"
Hmm? I do believe that I understand. But then, again? :)
A very well-written and easy reading poem, much thanks for the read.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much JE, appreciate it!
Best
B.