LOW LIFE

nature, moods

LOW LIFE

Flatland creeks
coil nearby wavy grassy marsh
brackish waters
sprinkle with reflections
of blueish hues
lowland pasture stretches
to the horizon
sunsets stroke the edge
vanish into thin air
nightfall allures a full moon
illuminating the wetlands
evening swamp creatures resurrect
entwine in love nests
music of passion
In gentle humid breezes
Till violet hues of dawn
hush the midnight song

My moods follow the soft curves
of the creek
if they waddle through the mid line
my spirit is buoyant
fish-tailing along with ripples of cool lemonade
yet, if I bounce off an earthy bulge
my spirit drowns to the murky bottom
where I lay while the bubbles play in the air
once in a while my head bobs up to breathe
but slumps with despair
perhaps if I play with my water creatures
they will lift my spirits towards the sun

Reviews

[William Richards]

This is lovely. Really get a strong sense of the image of the place and the narrator's fancies. It's a pleasure to read. I like the idea of a creek coiling... I've not thought of creeks like that before

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much, W. Really appreciate it.
Best, B.

[Dave Brown]

never mind my middling rhymes, your efforts reflect a competent, matured quality
I'm especially inclined to both of your recent efforts
Very well done
The old cabin reminds me of what our present house looked like when we moved in 50 yrs ago, except I don't drink tea

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks dear Dave, appreciate your words.
Beat,
B.

[Ken Simm.]

This is the kind of visual visceral write I love. When I can feel the moment and atmosphere of the natural. Excellent work my friend.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you my dear poet friend, really appreciate your artistic words.
Best
B.

[R.J Calzonetti (Siniste..]

Probably the absolute best thing I've read by you. I know this isn't much of a review, but it's hard to have a lot to say when I'm so happy with the work as a whole. Congrats, your hard work on writing sure is paying off!

Great poem

R.J

[Betty Hermelee]

Excuse the delayed response, but thank you so much for reading my poem and glad you liked it.
Best, B