THROUGH THE DUSK

lost, dark, woodsy

Through the Dusk

Through the dusk of crunchy leaves, crooked branches
at last a light, yet blurred to my eyes
I have trod a course for hours
circling full to fears of hinterland
alone, my pulse beats like a blender
at the trust this glow
I squint to view, receives me

I carry on, steps cautious
with my ancient
handmade stick
astute that prickly twigs
may snatch my eyelids
in the dark purple

As I footstep closer
I discern an old man
in a rocker with spectacles
I rap on the old wood door
the elder promptly greets me
with an inquisitive look
I'm lost, I say
He chuckles and invites me for tea
as I am thirsty from my hapless trek

Reviews

[Ken Simm.]

A wonderfully atmosic write. Excellent metaphor for so much of today.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much Ken, appreciate it.
Best
B.
PS I wii get to your work, not to worry

[Soren]

A wonderful trek through a threatening and lost land ending in finding comfort and welcome peace. A wonderful Allegory and metaphor for finding one's way in this life.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Soren for stopping by and reviewing my poem.
Best, Betty

[Unspoken poet]

This is simply amazing Betty, I enjoyed this thriller

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much, appreciate it!
Best, Betty

[William Michael Reeves]

This is one of those poems that makes me hope for a sequel. Intriguing poetry. Mystery wants to be solved leaving the reader wanting more. Why the trek? Who's the old man? What do you discuss over tea? Fun mysterious read.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much William, maybe a sequel?
Best
B.

[Lisasview]

Great story... such fun..With a nice wise ending..
Thank you for sharing..Betty
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Lisa, appreciate it
Best
Betty

[Coyote Poetry]

The poetry. A beginning for a tale. I liked the wandering and finding a place to rest. You left a open ending. I wanted to know more. What did they talk about? Thank you dear Betty for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you John for a great review!
Best, B

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Betty.

[Fran Marie]

Oh deliciously dark and creepy
and the photo matches this piece
perfectly ...im liking this scary write
Well Done...

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Fran for a lovely review; interesting that I never felt it was haunting….perhaps the setting was a bit creepy…..Best,
B.

[Fran Marie]

you're s o welcome😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I loved this, and the picture...eerie...
It would have felt creepy to find that cabin there, and the setting would have made me hesitant to approach.
But I would have...I like Scary.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks. Check J, really appreciate it.
Best, B

[Caitlin]

this reeled me in immediately. thanks for sharing!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for your review!
Best
Betty

[Vertigo Cat1111]

The visuals of this piece are brilliant and the storytelling makes just that much better. I love how differently this one can be read, and how the story unfolds. ‘Crooked branches, at last a light’. This poem really does feel like hope, and it’s just beautifully written. Thank you for sharing!

[Betty Hermelee]

Wow! Another great review from you, love it! Than you so much.