GHOSTLY QUIETUDE

relationships

GHOSTLY QUIETUDE

 

Suspicions emerge

When silence hides behind the moon

Once cozy eves, fine friends and wine

Now burrowing dialogue consumes

To dance in circumspect steps

Aware that somethings are amiss

When absences of length

Transform into ghostly quietude

 

Is there a secret not yet ripe?

Perhaps appalling misfortune

Bites those whose truth

Is buried in the sand

Which slowly meanders into the deep earth

 

Once the truth bursts

Is the dance floor too crowded?

Is the songster fearful to sing?

Is the dialogue too cogent?

 

We will evermore know

As the cavity among us emerges

Into an ocean of doomed waves

And we shan’t foregather

In the midway

Reviews

[LJ]

"Now burrowing dialogue consumes

To dance in circumspect steps"

...and it just gets better from here. Very dark, thoughtful, questioning, and true at times. The images are deep, and escalate in a fine way. The "cavity among us" is something we all sense sometimes. I like this a lot. It speaks of 'secrets' common to many adults and maybe some youths. The veracity of the verse is not lost in the cleverness of the structure. Good.

[Betty Hermelee]

What a wonderful review! Thank you so much!
Best, B

[Betty Hermelee]

Can u please give me your real name, trying to message you. thanks, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"burrowing dialogue consumes" "circumspect steps"
love those...and one of my favorite words is "shan't"
which reminds me of Gail Russell's character in The Uninvited from 1944...

there are shades of Poe here.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks J for a thoughtful review.
Best, B

[Betty Hermelee]

PS I'm flattered about your last comment!

[M. J. Smith]

Truth... how does one know the real from the false? Our hearts tell us, if we want to listen. But so many just go with what feels good. Astute thoughts, dear poet.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you M.J for your thoughtful review.
Best, B.