CHOPPY MOMENTS

DREAMS FADE

Choppy Moments

I fade into a deep drowse

the indigo ocean is arise
I float with other creatures
to seek dry land
our passage is rugged
waves froth and crash over our torsos
arduous to linger buoyant

Sight of an island
pops up green against
whitecaps
we swim, heads bob
from exhaustion
fortuitously, without gasp
we glide into shallows

I awaken from my dream, sweat gushes
deep breaths
I strain to evoke
foggy moments
colors blur
photographs turn fuzzy
then fade into an ashen plant

Reviews

[Patricia]

Wonderful writing, absolutely terrifying for me as I drowned once so water and I are not friends! Yeesh, I’m gonna have nightmares! But I loved the poetry! So vivid!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much P. but no nightmares, please!
Hugs xoxo

[cheyenne s garcia]

i really enjoyed reading this. it made me smile even.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you very much!
Best, Betty

[Miss Sharon]

Very vivid imagery here Betty! You had my heart beating faster than normal. ~Sharon

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much Sharon, glad you enjoyed it.
Best, B

[JE Falcon]

Hmm, had to read this 3 time to get ahold of the dream meanings, at least I think I did. --- The flow is great; the visuals were fuzzy until the second read, but I was happy I took a third turn, that is when I smiled. --- Thanks for the ride.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much for reviewing my poem
Best, B

[alanwgraham]

Great Betty. You never know where you're going when you nod off. The subconscious takes over and when you wake the memories go fuzzy and you're back to the real world. Or have I got that the wrong way round? By the way your poem reminded me of a story of mine called the deep.
All the best,
Alan.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Alan for a lovey review; and yes it was totally a dream, at least a good ending.
Best B.

[Kitterman]

Wow! the imagery is so vivid and the word choice is very impressive and cool. Nicely written

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much for stopping by to review.
Best, Betty

[Betty Hermelee]

on vacation, will get back to you soon!

[Lorry]

I love vivid dreams, which are probably even more vivid because when I have them, it's the abruptness of waking, sitting bolt upright, as opposed to the gentle laziness of waking slowly.
That said however, one I had a few years ago caused a serious fear of heights, which isn't so good if you are used to climbing or booking a new York Hotel only to find you're on the 38th 🤣
I do love the "phew" moment when you realise that it was all just a dream. Just like Dorothy 😊

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you my dear Lorry, always appreciated.
PS Cool Joe... is in production!!!
Best, B

[Fran Marie]

It's difficult to remember
everything that happens
in a dream ..unless it's
so vivid ..at any rate
you saw land within
the choppy waters
well expressed poem

Nicely penned

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank Fran for a lovely review
Best, B

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Betty… perhaps you had a Seagull moment in your Dream… to see the motion of the Ocean and feel the experience so vividly… the photo is impressive and I am glad you have reached the Shore. gently, Pat

[Betty Hermelee]

Dearest Pat ,thanks you for that lovely review!
Best, B

[Ada]

I know how it can be when a dream sort of fizzles out too prematurely and you are left to wonder what the next course of events would have been.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Ada for a lovely review.
Best, B.