DARK BLUE SCREAM

emptiness, colorless mood, snow

 

DARK BLUE SCREAM

Thick, wet snow

So deep, it blankets

My milieu, traps me

Indeed, coats my brain

At this moment in time

Life is white

Barren, empty

Pure yet dull

 

Words escape

With no color to create

I deem a disconnect with myself

Winter creatures are hush

Naught to stir me back to verve

 

Silence is a dark blue scream

When blackness veils me

Perhaps I shall doze off

This irksomeness

Reviews

[Meenakshi Dutta]

This poem reminds me of the days when I used to simply watch snowflakes out of my window, completely detached from worldly things.!! Damn! Completely justifies my feelings for snowy winters.
Loved it!
Greetings

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for stopping by
Best
B.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Betty, your word choice was delightful! Many can relate to this poem because a lot of folks do not like snow. We do not get much snow in Mississippi, but on the very rare times we do I want to go out and be in it! I love the powdery stuff, but I do have to say I do not want it to stay! Enjoyed your poem!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Kathy... appreciate it!
Best, B

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

My pleasure!

[Katarzyna Anna Koziorow..]

Oh my! Your poetry deserves the top shelf! Indeed, congratulations on your incredible talent. Please visit my profile sometimes, your opinion is very important to me. Greetings!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for a wonderful review!!!
I have read your poetry, and will read more!!!
Best, Betty

[Patricia]

I’m feeling this one of late. Our weather has been unbearable. Snow, rain, a white squall then an ice storm and now more snow. That’s Illinois for ya. It gives me a headache and I want to sleep until I hear morning doves and robins. Nicely done! Very relatable

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear P. Appreciate your comments
Best, B

[Patricia]

Hugs B! ;)

[William Michael Reeves]

Taking liberties with the English language? I do it! Maybe I should look up irksomeness first before I write that....

I was just commenting with Cherrie about the word rime and its meaning then came to read you and this. I said my mind was suffering from rhyme rime. That's exactly what you were writing about here! Interesting how the next thing we read can relate to something just past. I'll see if you dozed it off in the next poem.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank so much, WMR, I really appreciate your review.
Best, B

[Betty Hermelee]

PS by the way, irksomeness is a real word!!! ha ha

[William Michael Reeves]

You got me! Just looked it up. I've just about doubled my vocabulary since joining the Cafe. That line 'silence is a dark blue scream'
is so powerful! I'm imagining all the colors different screams can be.

[Betty Hermelee]

Yes, I didn’t want to use dark or black but a real color that would aptly describe what was to come.
Best, B.😊

[John the Baptist]

An appropriate offering for this snowy January. Here the snow is seen as something that envelops the consciousness, so that all seems "Barren, empty/ Pure yet dull." Further on the speaker mentions something like a creative impasse where a sort of inner disconnect is felt. The last verse sounds something very like depression or an overwhelming boredom. Usually these things pass, but the right medication doesn't hurt, either.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks John for a fine review. Your mind definitely drifts toward the health field!!! I'm going to start calling you "Doc" John!
Best, B

[Ada]

Many of us go into shutdown mode during the winter season when much of our surrounding seems bleak; this the reader understands completely. It usually isn't until spring that life returns to awaken us.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much Ada for an understanding review.
Best, B.

[light and ashes]

Snow is such an interesting thing, because while the beauty of it causes a warm feeling within you it so cold to the touch. Snow represents purity and also the harsh and emotionless, 98.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much for reading., appreciate it.
Best, B.

[light and ashes]

You are very welcome.

[cheyenne s garcia]

absolutely great ! i enjoyed this piece so much.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for stopping by and reviewing my poem
Best, Betty

[cheyenne s garcia]

You are welcome.

[Ken Simm.]

Sad and almost gothic in its melodrama. Which is not a bad thing here. It gives a true picture of the depth and emotion of winter.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much Ken for your thoughtful review!
Best, B