BLACK DAGGERS

weakness, prove strength

Black Daggers

Black daggers
Beam on you
From green eyes
Dripping with mascara
Water away the swagger
Defeat the anger, the dark
In your spirit
Scars on your lips
Restore for second round
Persistence  of flesh, though bruised,
Ashen, weak,
Yet you shall never
Vanquish me
In spite of my frail persona
My ego trumps

Reviews

[Vertigo Cat1111]

This is such an intense, gripping poem that had you sucking in every word. The ending of this poem feels tough, as if the victory after being worn to the bone, or even worse. This is such a beautiful piece and deeply emotional. I love how all the lines convey a sense of more danger, in a way. I loved this piece, thank you so much for sharing!

[Betty Hermelee]

And... thank you for reviewing, a well thought out one too. Best, B.

[Patricia]

This was my life once, I emphasize and sympathize with this piece-that is so gripping and original, wow B!

[Betty Hermelee]

so sad P, but look at you now!! And thanks for being so honest. and kind. Hugs

[Zoe Richardson]

What a powerful poem! I love the line 'scars on your lips.' It conveys someone who likes to use their words to hurt, which, of course, is so much more damaging that using your fists. This is a wonderful poem for anyone who knows what it's like to fight back.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Zoe for a fine review; yes it’s important, especially for a woman, to not get intimidated!
Best, B.

[Zoe Richardson]

As a survivor of domestic abuse, I heartily agree. Weaponized feelings are more dangerous than guns.

[Dave Brown]

green eyes and black daggers, perfect combo
Are you for hire
My ego needs a mega-boost

[Betty Hermelee]

Not for hire Dave, but thanks for your lovely review….
Best
B.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I read this fine piece imagining a woman reciting this to Bukowski...
Hooray for her.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks J. Yes women have to defend themselves against abuse and to show that they are not weak
read moreThanks J. Yes women have to defend themselves against abuse and to show that they are not weak
Best
B.

[Chris Shaw]

Strong write of defiance here Betty. Standing eye to eye. "Restore for second round" tells me that the abuse suffered previously is not going to happen again. Powerful writing. Really like your posted image too.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Chris, I think the woman was trying not to be weak, outdoing the man.
truly
B.

[M. J. Smith]

You, a frail persona? I find that hard to believe! The strength to stand up to abuse is rare, though. Gets inside your head like insidious whispering. Self gets buried. Thoughts and emotions well visualized.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much for your review!
Best, B.

[John the Baptist]

This has the sound of one who has been abused in some way. It is a statement of defiance directed toward the abuser, and frankly, if I were that individual, I would give serious consideration to applying for a concealed carry permit.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you John, yes the woman is proving her strength... Best, B

[Kelly Scheppers]

"...for when I am weak, then I am strong." Your staccato lines resonate with this verse for me, Betty. Great illustration for impact! Love those green eyes!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Kelly, yes a woman is not weak!!!
Best, B.

[William Michael Reeves]

I really liked that idea that an ego can trump. It gets such a bad rap but an important part of our psyche and persona. We'd just be bland without it. And confidence gives strength. I think that's what you were writing about isn't it?

[Betty Hermelee]

yes, indeed, and thank you for that review.
Best, B