TUNES OF VENUS

delusional, imagination.

TUNES OF VENUS

 

My eyes adrift

My core conceals behind the moon

I glance at an exotic universe

Imagine me up here

Swaying to the tunes of Venus

Razzing to the drumbeat of Mars

 

Whoa I’m soaring

My heart beats to the sun’s fiery blast

Bubbles my blood to red hot

Pink horses gallop amid the blinking stars

Orange flames thrash out

 

How long will this delightful delusion linger?

Or will I soon return to my wretched life

When the high wears off

Drop to my knees in frustration

Mask behind dark shadows

Quiver and shake until my body quiets

 

Hang around, wait for more

Unless I get lucky

I may get kicked or killed

Before my next waste

My muse is silent

I ache, pain thrives

Scream further

Some kind dude rescues me

I don’t give a damn if it’s a rusty needle

 

 

Author's Note

painting by Betty Hermelee

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"She never mentions the word addiction, in certain company, she'll tell you she's an orphan after you meet her family." from She Talks to Angels by Black Crowes

At first glance I thought this might be one of those women are from Venus, men are from Mars kind of deals.
But it took an unsuspected direction for me. It's a sad situation like so many sad situations in the world today and the problem just keeps growing. Over 90% of all heroin in the US comes in from Mexico. But we are told that open southern borders have no effect on the trafficking. Still, there's quite a lot of drugs and cash seized there by US Customs and Border Patrol. A sad ending to this topical piece. Great write. F.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much Fabian
Happy New Year!🎈🎆

[Fran Marie]

A powerful poem packed with
defined detail..swaying to
the tunes of venus is just
one of the many great lines
with in this well penned piece
killer ending ..nice work

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much Fran, appreciate your reviews
Happy everything!
Betty

[Fran Marie]

you re welcome
Merry Christmas

[Karmee]

Wow, truly wonderful
and quite powerful
this is amazing

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much for stopping by and a lovely review! Best, Betty

[Patricia]

wow! what an amazing write! so much from watching a painting, you have quite the eye B. Addiction is such a serious problem and is heartbreaking and it makes us feel helpless when we want to help but they have to want to help themselves first, this I know from family history. Keep watching those paintings B. Love P.

[Betty Hermelee]

Wow! What a review! Many of the parents of abused kids that I work with are druggies and ultimately lode their kids….to foster care or adoption! Love B.

[Ken Simm.]

What a poem Betty. Such a denuement. Difficult and red with addicts pain but beautiful nontheless.

[Betty Hermelee]

What a review! Thanks so much!!!
Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such an intriguing painting, Betty...
and the poem is as well...
a rusty needle might be our last hope when it comes down to it.
bad trips remind me so much of the sixties.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you J. For a lovely review; some of my pairings are a bit weird…best
B.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like "weird"!

[Betty Hermelee]

GREAT! I have some more!

[Relic]

Some addicts will go to the brink of death to escape life while they're still here. I didn't expect that ending. Great poem, Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much for your comments.
Best, B

[Dave Brown]

as we remain concerned about the ongoing virus parade, we have mainly forgotten about the overdose deaths that continue to take place
I may be mistaken, but I believe there are as many or more deaths from overdoses

BTW. when does Betty Hermelee do a display of her art
Huh?

[Betty Hermelee]

Always Dave! Thanks for your kind review!
Best, B

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

This has got to be one of the most darkest pieces of poetry I have read from you B. A very powerful piece that speaks of addiction in such a haunting way. It is a message and warning one will not soon forget. Excellent write B.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much dear Carlos.. appreciate immensely.
Best, B

[William Michael Reeves]

I thought I was reading a great sci-fi poem then Wham! Big surprise twist and ending. I love surprise in poetry and music.

I just went back and read it again and now I hurt for you. Which is just what poetry should do. I'll be thinking about this one for awhile.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much for your comments William.
Best, Betty