A WALK IN THE RAIN

LOST LOVE

A WALK IN THE RAIN

 

I failed to impede you this time

we shared such wholeness

yet, you shunted me

we preserved all the elements

you and I lit the stars

crossed the waves

winked at the moon

set the sun on fire

ours was a keeper

or so I deemed

you packed your bags

and stepped out in the pouring rain

on a foggy morn

as I granted your exit

My eyes welled up with mixed salty tears

 

Now I am alone to wonder why

where have you gone?

I truly desire your being

your flesh, your green eyes, your caress

will you think of me sometimes?

I will scribble you a note if you do the same

where will I find comfort?

since you left me

just when I needed you most

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

https://pandora.app.link/DLfg8kVDglb
RANDY VAN WARMER "JUST WHEN I NEEDED YOU MOST

Reviews

[JE Falcon]

This was relatable and flowed well. Overall, I really liked it but it slapped me in my logic with the rain pouring and it was foggy. I know this can happen, especially on hilly terrain, but the line caught me off guard enough so I had to stop and re-read those two lines over, making sure I didn't read it wrong. Once I knew that I didn't, I re-read the whole thing and it flowed without stopping. --- Thanks for a pleasant read. And might I offer some sound advice from the past? Stay clear of those with green eyes. :)

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for visiting and reviewing my poem.
I live in the mountains and we get p,entry of Cain and fog

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[Betty Hermelee]

Sorry for the spelling errors, appreciate your comments…..and thanks for stopping by!
Best
Betty

[JE Falcon]

No problem, my pleaser. :)

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Betty... A walk in the Rain is a lonely time
when someone has silently left... Wishing you a
Chance at Happiness and the Caress of a worthy
Partner... perhaps you will meet "Blue Eyes crying in the Rain",
and together you can plant a Garden of ever-blooming refrains.
tenderly, Pat

[Betty Hermelee]

I love this song and felt a need to write about it...
lovely review Pat, as always
Best, B

[Fran Marie]

I truly desire your being
your flesh, your green eyes, your caress
will you think of me sometimes?
Oh wow ..this is a poignant piece
I can feel the wanton emotions
the in depth need of longing
for this lost love who walked out
on that rainy day

so we'll penned.
and deeply expressed

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much Fran, really appreciate your reviews.
Best, B