LOST

searching for love

LOST

 

We owned a love once

It squandered over time

Remember our foreheads rubbed

Our cores heated under soft woolen blankets

Tawdry laughs until tears veiled our cheeks

Nights of silence, as we goggled into our eyes

Tasting each other’s fancies

Seated like yogis under a half moon twilight

Racing our old mares through rain-soaked fields

Partaking our picnic with fresh fruit

Dripping down our chins

We owned a love once

 

To be without you is half of me

I sense your void

It torments me

My misery reaches to the furthest star

I shan’t get my bearing

Wasted love is my undoing

I will carry on living as your shadow

Whilst we own our love once more

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

This poem is loosely based on the song above
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Reviews

[barleygirl]

I can't believe you posted this bread image . . . I played their early stuff incessantly when all my friends were rockin' out to Led Zeppelin & Jimi Hendrix. I still have an urge to hide that I ever listened to bread! Anyhow, your poem is top-notch. The first stanza, especially, becuz you paint a bunch of imagery that's so relatable we can picture it in our minds, and yet, not one speck of the typical trite stuff people usually pull out of the closet to signify "the hippie days" or whatever. Great poem! (((HUGS)))

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for that thoughtful review! And again honored by your inspiration to become a better poet
read moreThanks for that thoughtful review! And again honored by your inspiration to become a better poet
Hugs , B

[Betty Hermelee]

Hugs and appreciate your comments!

[Samuel Dickens]

It begs the question, "Is it better to have love and lost than to have not loved at all?" Many would say "Yes". For good or bad, it's our nature to want to be loved. Personally, I never learned my lesson.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear Samuel, And I'm you learned it, you just don't remember!!!
Best, B

[PlayWrite]

warm tender words
kinda feels like im sitting by a campfire as i read it

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your lovely review
Best
Betty

[PlayWrite]

its my pleasure

[Pauline]

A very sad but very beautiful read Betty. We never seem to know just what we had until it's gone do we? Thanks for posting.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Pauline for visiting me and such a lovely review!
Best, Betty

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree dear Betty.
"To be without you is half of me
I sense your void
It torments me
My misery reaches to the furthest star
I shan’t get my bearing
Wasted love is my undoing
I will carry on living as your shadow
Whilst we own our love once more"
the above lines. I understand. We miss, what we don't have no-more. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you John for a lovely review!
Best, B

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Betty.

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Betty. I just love Bread, so thank you for bringing them back to me. Thank you also for your fine words on lost love. Sometimes you don’t know what you’ve got till it’s gone.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Very true indeed Chris…. I love Bread too! Thanks fir such a nice review!
Best, B.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"To be without you is half of me"
Love that line....the poem is a haunting melody...sometimes we just can't recover...we need that love back.
and great song...
"Life without you isn't worth the trouble of"---
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for a lovely review J.
Best, B

[John the Baptist]

We get two different views in this offering. The first stanza is memories of the past, when love was in bloom and the world seemed as though it couldn't get any better. Stanza two abruptly offers a stark contrast. Though not said specifically, we get the feeling the beloved has passed on, and the speaker comes across as one in mourning, living in "your void." The reference to "wasted love" may mean other, subsequent relationships that have been unsatisfactory. At any rate, the speaker is not not despairing, content to go on living as "your shadow." When the real thing is absent, sometimes memories have to suffice.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks dear John for a very detailed review!
Best
B.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I so love the band Bread, especially their song "If". It is so haunting a melody and love song. This is a heart-rending poem that reflects on past moments of a once and still enduring love. You capture them so eloquently in word. Thank you, B, for sharing your art with us.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks do much for a thoughtful review Carlos
Best, B.

[EmeraldHeart]

Very deep and touching work. To lose a person one loves. One of human's hardest of struggle s.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for you kind words,
Best, Betty

[EmeraldHeart]

My pleasure Betty.