THE SEA HEARTS

full/empty hearts: BREVITY POEM

THE SEA HEARTS

 

Weightless hearts

bob up and down

on a cerulean blue sea

fisherman smile

dolphin’s wink

 

Weighted, woeful hearts

sink to the bottomless depths

to bond with onerous beasts

not once will they see the sun

Author's Note

Thank you for reading!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful photo and wonderful use of description dear Betty. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry. I enjoyed this one.
Coyote

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much for a lovely review John
Best, B.

[Lorry]

Well that's where I've been going wrong! Knew I should have emptied pockets and baggage before going for a swim. 😊
Oh, and see cool Joe 23...on it! 😊

[Betty Hermelee]

You're too funny!!! Thanks always for you comments!
Thanks for COOL JOE too!!! more action coming!!!

[emmajoy]

Your words really set the mind thinking, Betty - and so seems, is more than subtle. The second stanza is cleverly, sadly, formed. Yet, surely if that heart was exposed to the sun, it would shrivel and die.. gone.

Happens with human hearts too, of course.. but, for different reasons! Original thinker, you.. and always immensely readable

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you my dear Emma; trying to be a thinker!!!
Thank so much for your thoughtful reviewread moreThank you my dear Emma; trying to be a thinker!!!
Thank so much for your thoughtful review
warm regards, B

[emmajoy]

You're more than welcome. Enjoy the weekend, take care, keep safe. : )

[jacob erin-cilberto]

That awful sinking feeling of losing love...and yet at the bottom of the sea, hope might spring eternal.
there are many beautiful fish in the sea....we might find another who will swim with us into the future.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Yes a weighted heart is no fun, but since this is poetry, your'e right maybe a fish could save it!read moreYes a weighted heart is no fun, but since this is poetry, your'e right maybe a fish could save it!
Thanks always for your thoughtful reviews, J
Best, B

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for a sweet review! Always appreciated.
B.

[Poetic Beauty]

There are so many mysterious and beautiful creatures that live within the sea and never see the light above the water.

[Betty Hermelee]

I know, and this creature's heart has sunk to the bottom. Thanks for your review!!
yours truly,
B

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome

[John the Baptist]

Sounds like a call to jettison the ballast. Those weighted down by negativity banish themselves from the light. Nice imagery in this one, but do you need that apostrophe at the end of the first stanza?

[Betty Hermelee]

Poets license, forget the apostrophe! What about the content? Come on John give the old bag a break...
Thanks for reading (/I’ll take a peak)😏
Best, B

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Another wonderfully imaginative poem, Betty. Living 10 minutes near the coast I love poetry about her beauty. Thank you for sharing.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for reading! A nice review....
Best,
Betty