LIFE STORY

allegory of life, kindness

LIFE STORY

 

My tenuous wings

persistent wind blows

weakens my spirit

lazily slump

into a warm

wrinkled hand

my flaps forego

demise awaits

 

Stranger’s kindness

induces my second’s dream

wings fortify to fly

once again

kiss the flowers

hop the grass

hope

 

This day

my life’s story

edges towards

the earth’s abyss

where my fellow

extinct butterflies

belong

in this totality

 

 

 

Reviews

[Vertigo Cat1111]

This poem is something amazing, but especially the last few lines. A truly beautiful piece that describes that 'butterfly' feeling and each word you use is so deep and adds an extra layer to this already wonderful piece. I always love when people use butterflies in poetry but this is one of the best ones I've seen!

[Betty Hermelee]

WOW! What an amazing review!!! Thank you so much, it is so appreciated., Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Butterflies are free, but a kind hand reaching out...makes it worth giving up that freedom and finding
compromise and love in flying together.
I have found that total strangers might give us more of a reason to smile than those who are
so close to us...like family or those we think are friends but then find out they derive from a hornet's nest with the purpose of stinging our hearts, causing us pain.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

How right you are Jacob; I can think more of perfect strangers' kindness than half of my family!!! Thanks J for a fine review!!
Best, B

[emmajoy]

Strong, specific words, without frills but - sighs to accept, wonder at then, move onwards to the next mystery. A day can hold mystery and learning wrapped in the desire to not merely look but SEE and - even more, FEEL. Your writing takes a theme, takes it to heart, sees the truth in it. Shows amazing skill.

Thank you for sharing, Betty. Keep safe, take care.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much Emma for an in depth review; you always have intuitive things to say.
You take care too.
Best, B

[emmajoy]

Returned to edit such a rambling review, so very sorry for that, Betty. x