THE PACKAGE

BREVITY POEM love wrapped up

Make me, take me

Mold me into your spirit

Let us enfold into one

Perfumed lips smack together

Honeydew bodies overlay

rose-scented breaths entwine

love has wrapped us into

a blind drunk package with a red bow

 

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

These are the best types of package Betty. Perfumed lips, smack together. Who can resist that? A lovely little read which udms both fragrant and warming at the same time. All the best.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for a fresh look at “ the package “ of love... always appreciate your reviews.
Take good care
Betty

[mattavelli]

Hello, Betty! :)
This is the best kind of poetry, where babies come from. Haha
Thanks for sharing.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're quite welcome; love sometimes does come in a package, or should I say baggage!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved how you used the language dear Betty. You made the need and want understandable and wonderful. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your kind review. Just sort of came to me!
Best, Betty

[Coyote Poetry]

You did well dear Betty and you are welcome.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks again!

[Lorry]

Blind drunk on love or are those perfumed lips scented in gin, as my wandering mind connects that thought to perfumed taste?
Whatever the origin of your meaning, the want and need are so perfectly captured in such a compact box, leaving me wondering if I should just print this as my letter to Santa next year 😊

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for your review, you're pretty witty.
PS, when u have time check out next ch, of COOL JOE

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I can't even find the damn bow!

But I think it was red once.

Love this, Betty...

[Betty Hermelee]

Why thank you sir Jacob! Your remarks are very funny, and of course I always appreciate your readread moreWhy thank you sir Jacob! Your remarks are very funny, and of course I always appreciate your read
Best, B

[Miss Sharon]

(love has wrapped us into a blind drunk package with a red bow) Wow...what a closure to this write. Well done. ~Sharon

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for your review and for stopping by to read my poem at the Cafe.
Best, Betty