SNOW GRAINS

Haiku- Snow

Pine trees sink with snow

as my heart senses its mood

black, white fuse as one

Frigid air keeps still

white stick branches creak, whine, groan

clear footprints breathe life

Snow grains on canvas

emerge in face of blackness

red-hued speck pops out

Author's Note

Photo by Betty
outside my window

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

This one features really good nature imagery. More fascinating, though, is the way the poem weaves the speaker's emotions into the natural setting: White snow, black depression. The dichotomy continues in the second verse, with the melancholy sounds of the snow laden branches contrasted with the life affirming footprints. The contrasts continue through the first two lines of the last verse, and then that red hued speck appears. Not entirely sure of the meaning of this, but I'm thinking it's a life symbol.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks John for that thoughtful review....actually that red speck was a form of life.... a bird...it also was a real scene as I captured it in the photo....best, Betty

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for sharing outside your window with us Betty as well as this set of three haikus. Each one could stand alone or as you have presented them in a set of three. Beautifully descriptive and oh, so cold. We also have very cold weather, and a few flurries but no settled snow yet. Now will you be venturing outside to build yourself a snowman? Take care my friend.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

It was so beautiful Chris, and now it's almost gone, but at least i could capture it enough to write.
You take care too, B

[Just Kim]

Such a wonderful and lovely haiku.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for visiting me Kim and also thanks for the review!