SNOW GRAINS

Haiku- Snow

Pine trees sink with snow

as my heart senses its mood

black, white fuse as one

Frigid air keeps still

white stick branches creak, whine, groan

clear footprints breathe life

Snow grains on canvas

emerge in face of blackness

red-hued speck pops out

Author's Note

Photo by Betty
outside my window

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

This one features really good nature imagery. More fascinating, though, is the way the poem weaves the speaker's emotions into the natural setting: White snow, black depression. The dichotomy continues in the second verse, with the melancholy sounds of the snow laden branches contrasted with the life affirming footprints. The contrasts continue through the first two lines of the last verse, and then that red hued speck appears. Not entirely sure of the meaning of this, but I'm thinking it's a life symbol.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks John for that thoughtful review....actually that red speck was a form of life.... a bird...it also was a real scene as I captured it in the photo....best, Betty

[Poetic Beauty]

Vivid imagery and beautiful even though I dislike winter and the snow

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for your review, I like looking at it, but that's about it!!!

[Poetic Beauty]

Unfortunately I find it cold bleak, dreary and void of color

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Betty... Being a Bird lover... I could imagine a bright Red Cardinal
in the misty snow laden branches. We are expecting some Snow today...
we shall see. It has been about two weeks since you wrote your poem.
Here in Fredericksburg, Virginia, by the Rappahannock River, we have a lot of
older Pine trees for snow to fall softly like little Guilts of Patchwork memories.
Alway enjoy your poetry. gently, Pat

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Pat for your lovely review, as always
Betty

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Your words are very descriptive. I imagined myself on one of my winter hikes as I was reading, right down to the cardinal's appearance! Well done.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your review and your visit!
Best , Betty

[Coyote Poetry]

Cold days in my Michigan too. I am waiting for Spring. Hello dear Betty. Photo and words made me colder. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Nice photo and poetic imagery to boot. I also like the sound words you've used here. tyfs

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for your lovely review!

[poetgurl]

Such a beautiful write, very well written.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for visiting a a lovely review!

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Seasonal simplicity that shares such an abundance of poetical images and great wordplay - loved the read! :-)

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Phil for your thoughtful review!

[barleygirl]

Great job painting the scene using imagery that pops visuals into the reader's mind. The heaviness of your observations make it feel like the weight of the winter is upon the narrator's soul. As much as I detest cold, this scene would bog me down too! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Marge; we just had a gorgeous snow, couldn't resist....just enough
Hugs, me

[Wild Rose]

Snow grains _ you mean ice drops or path is covered with them

Certainly, the fir tree branches droop under the snow gloves
The birds peck at the ice seeking water (We gave them some)

It is a different world today
Thanks for the images

[Betty Hermelee]

I really meant snow grains, instead of snow flakes; thanks for the kind review