THE DEFINITIVE KISS

THE DEFINITIVE KISS

A Poem by Betty Hermelee
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sad departing

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Her Green eyes follow his low hip swing
blue and white uniform
darkened by the sky
wanes to a blur as distance moans

She endearingly tastes his definitive kiss
a medley of honey, cloves, and cinnamon
the smell of his cologne
a mingle of pinewood, sage, and turmeric

Isolation embarks on bleakness
frigid season surfaces
she trusts the winter moon for compose

Time transcends oceans
waves convey relevance
faces melt away into a color wash

She awakens from a dream in a slimy sweat
the spare side vacant
her torso stretches and yawns
dresses in a pink silk robe, gently sweeps the pine floor
gingerly kisses his photo
this once only a memory
of intimate senses she so reveres
his embodiment exists
in her own shadowy universe

© 2020 Betty Hermelee


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I loved dear Betty, how you used the language.
"her torso stretches and yawns
dresses in a pink silk robe, gently sweeps the pine floor
gingerly kisses his photo
this once only a memory"
The above lines. You gave the description, power and wonder. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

Thank you; your review is much appreciated !
Coyote Poetry

3 Years Ago

You are welcome dear Betty.
Your poem gives a "retro" feel since anyone in current times would be texting & checking for new selfies obsessively thru-out the early hours & days of a definitive parting such as your poem implies. You use a ton of inventive imagery, stated with originality. Love all the scents of the kiss (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

P.S. I’m putting up chapter 6 of COOL JOE, would like your opinion, when you have a minute...quest.. read more
barleygirl

3 Years Ago

I'm feeling scattered today, but I plan on heavy reviewing this weekend, so I'll get to it. Thanks f.. read more
Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

So appreciated!
Quite a mystery to this piece because I am unsure whether it is a temporary or permanent separation. A military man going off to serve or perhaps never coming back. Whatever, she is missing his tender touch a great deal. Very nicy penned Betty.

Chris

Posted 3 Years Ago


Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

Hey Chris, I guess I wrote this to confuse readers!! But you can interpret any way you choose,
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To trust the Winter Moon in her pink silk gown and taste the kisses of honey, cloves and cinnamon would take her to the Moon and back... tenderly, Pat

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

Thanks Pat, always appreciate your views, they are poetry in themselves!
This is a haunting piece, made especially so by the last lines. We get the initial impression that the absent loved one is either a member of the military or an airline pilot. All indications are that he is only temporarily gone. By poem's end, though, we wonder if we are beholding a woman's delusions, or maybe even dementia. For some of the bereaved, there is only the past.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

Thanks John for your compelling review; it is a bit haunting, deliberately; Best, Betty

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Betty Hermelee
Betty Hermelee

Black Mountain, NC



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My love of poetry results from my love of art. As a painter I am able to express myself on a canvas. As a poet my words come from my heart, my moods, sometimes sad, mostly upbeat. I like to use vivid .. more..

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